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OwlSA
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0 posted 2011-01-18 05:06 PM



ALONE
1991

Perhaps
it was intended
that I walk
alone.

Perhaps
there is none
who can feel
song
and sun
and colour
and sweetness
of hay
and
honey,
as I.

Perhaps
one greygreen autumn day
a rugged stranger
will,
with silent footfall,
and respect
for forest creatures,
come wandering
through
the green mists
of my garden trees
and
perhaps
we will understand
each other,
and
perhaps
not.

Owl

© Copyright 2011 Diana van den Berg - All Rights Reserved
The_Doctors_Angel_32
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1 posted 2011-01-18 05:41 PM


Very beautifully written. I know this feeling oh so well. I have come to the conclusion though that if I am meant to be alone I am meant to be alone. Also I am happy living the single life. I truly enjoyed this read!!!

When the family is together, the soul is at peace - Russian Proverb


Rex Allen McCoy
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2 posted 2011-01-18 05:41 PM


Had to chuckle at the last line ... love your 'sa la vi' temperament
JerryPat
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3 posted 2011-01-18 05:43 PM


It's a chance taken, a chance mistaken in the century's-old trial and error in the matter of the heart.

We each must give of ourselves to have a half a chance of fulfillment.

~ Clones are people two ~

faithmairee
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4 posted 2011-01-18 05:43 PM


very profound and moving poem...beautifully written!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

OwlSA
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5 posted 2011-01-18 06:03 PM


Thank you, Julie.  Sometimes it can be a good thing.

Rex, you had me chuckling too, once I had caught on to your personalised spelling of c’est la vie!  

Jerry, yes, you are right about the trial and error.  I have bumped my head so often with the wrong choice, but didn’t let that put me off trying again, sometimes with the same man (usually a mistake) or the next.  In a poem of mine called “It’s the Africa in Me” I have a stanza which reads:

It’s the Africa in me
that has taught me how to love
and patches up the fragments of my soul after each disaster
and renews my zeal and increases my understanding
in preparation for the next onslaught.

You have the secret, Jerry in “We each must give of ourselves to have half a chance of fulfilment” but it can be a problem when one continually gives of him/herself far more than the other.

Thank you Faith for your touching words.

Owl

Spiros Zafiris
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6 posted 2011-01-18 06:43 PM


..much enjoyed; very songlike..>>spiros
OwlSA
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7 posted 2011-01-18 06:46 PM


Thank you, I am glad you enjoyed it, Spiros.

Owl

steavenr
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8 posted 2011-01-18 09:53 PM


love the ambiguity of the ending...such a lovely write...as I read it to conclusion, I thought to myself, hmmm, even in perfection there is doubt...well expressed...I enjoyed it
Rex Allen McCoy
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9 posted 2011-01-18 10:21 PM


sorry about the spelling ... I'm still learning my French from product labels

Marchmadness
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10 posted 2011-01-18 11:26 PM


Lovely write, Diana. I am in pretty much the same situation but feel that I am content with it at this stage of the game.
                              Ida

The Lady
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11 posted 2011-01-19 12:46 PM




I love it Diana
but I hope there is
a rugged stranger somewhere
waiting for your
silent footfall.

OwlSA
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12 posted 2011-01-19 07:18 AM


Sorry, Rex.  I thought you did that on purpose for fun.  Smiles.

Thank you Ida.  Me too, well,  pretty much.  

Thank you, Kate, but I doubt that there will be any more, not at this late stage, but that is OK.  I have some good memories.

Owl

CocoBaci
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13 posted 2011-05-10 01:14 AM



Enjoyed...

2islander2
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14 posted 2011-05-10 04:06 AM


Hi Owl, I am sure it will cause your heart deserves it, I love solitude too and the infinite grace of your words,

have a nice day

yann

Martie
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15 posted 2011-05-10 12:58 PM


Diana...Perhaps you are not as alone as you think you are.  Hugs!
OwlSA
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16 posted 2011-05-10 04:30 PM


Thank you, Yann for your beautiful reply and your warm words.

Thank you, Martie.  You could just be right!  Smiles.  Thanks for the hugs, and hugs back (they were actually higs until I saw my typo).  

Owl

OwlSA
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17 posted 2011-05-11 02:57 AM


Oops!  Missed your reply, CocoBaci.  Thank you.

Owl

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