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of shuddering sun |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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you left your veils in the car with the windows down since you knew they might get stolen somehow and you would just be left with nothing on but my eyes and perhap a smile or two from the passing traffic on the southbound you said you had collected donations from them and your purse was overfilled with promices so would I take them in trade for some reality and some other things you had only dreamed of but never mentioned to anyone except a stranger there was a fragile to your reckless abandon so I slipped it off the chair and tasted slowly the sipping whiskey of a woman wanting sinful is better than any good girl with their tears so I drank more than you had brought with you and made you stay longer until I was insatiable ______________ daark |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Loved this! My kind of writing, Sir. The good girl-bad girl comparison? Well done and well said. ~ Clones are people two ~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I love the comparison in this one DS All of us are vulnerable somehow and this shows both sides of the basic personality and a search for companionship no matter how unusual it may be. Had a friend one time that could fight like a mad bear but was afraid of squirrels of all things, go figure. He was only 5 ft 22 inches tall.....sheesh! Great writing man! Eric Love does not look after it's own interests. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Thanks JP... ____________ thank you ET |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah, according to your last line, you never did let her leave.  I like the lines and flow, sir... but you knew I would. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sun..would hope she would never want to...thanks lady friend for stopping by |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Enjoyed this piece, and the replys that followed.  -Trina |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks ms sinz |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Whoa!  ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!" |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks garapan |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
More kewlness from the Daark master! Great stuff here, D  A |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Sorry, sticky keys  Mod, plz remove the extras? ThxA |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I've never known Amaryllis to stutter like that....................................? Usually she's perfectly fluent with great coherence. Just me maybe? Eric two maggots were fighting in dead earnest! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
a'mary a'mary a'mary a'mary a'mary...thanks lady..(grin) sticky keys? did you spill your cocoa on the keyboard again? _________________ thank you et...you know how those girls are when they eat chocolate and type.. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Y'know, sometimes it is just plain fun to read the comments... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sun...yep, like each was at a different window..thanks babe |
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