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When Once I Could Write... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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..F ....a ......l ........l ..........i ............n ..............g ................~Dreams~ How sad the nights, as darkened shadows loom, The moon in all it's glow has hid it's face. For dreams of yesterday have turned to gloom. Treasured memories, leave no imprint, trace. Her hazel eyes that changed from blue to gray, Hold back the rivers flow of lonely tears. And yet a glint, a twinkle, seems to play Upon your face, eyes search to quell the fears. To wish upon a lonely star, it seems In hopes that out there, someone captures sight. Then two on one will reach to share the dreams That fall below to rest upon this night. The falling dreams once shared of yesterday Will someday rise on high to light the way. M/M(inspired...when once I could write) "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." (Will Moss) [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (01-18-2011 06:25 AM).] |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Writing is like riding that darned old bicycle, you never forget how. This is a lonely poem about tears and solitariness. But it clings to hope, however faint, that there really is someone out there for the narrator. Nice work. ~ Clones are people two ~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very emotional render here Maureen and the depth of feeling is so well delivered. I think you're quite an inspired and gifted writer. Eric Love does not look after it's own interests. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Relating, Sis, relating! |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
Hi, Maur! Good stuff! Poetry uses fuel, like anything else, to get moving (or motivated.) That fuel is inspiration, and it's our job as writers to find that fuel to keep our works flowing. You may find, that a 'different inspiration' may provoke a different and new writing style. Lots of buddy love to ya, M, Jeff |
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The_Doctors_Angel_32 Member
since 2011-01-14
Posts 337Florida, USA |
This is an awesome poem. Everyone has to have motivation to write. Even I get stuck in a writers' block. Sometimes for a long time. I so know the feeling. I truly enjoyed the read!!!  When the family is together, the soul is at peace - Russian Proverb |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Maureen, you are very mistaken if you think you can no longer write. Though sad, this was very beautiful, as always. Owl |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
You have written some of the best poetry I've ever read and you can write some of the best poetry I'll ever read ... what you can't do, is give up |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
JerryPat, I love your thoughtful responses. Sometimes life is just in limbo and I am not so good at that dance  Eric, I reread recently some summaries I received from a class that was necessary for me to take to rebuild my self-confidence and many of them said I was exceptionally emotional. As I once explained, my father (when I was very young) said there would never be a lack of water in our home! Thank you. Karilea, thank you for always being here. Jeff, I think I need an overhaul. Hugs to you too. The_Doctors_Angel_32, thank you again and if I haven't welcomed you yet, it's nice to read you here. Diana, bits and pieces of old to help me with the new...Thank you. Rex, You have always been so kind to me on here and I thank you for that. M |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Oh no, no, no, no. I beg to differ. Love IS blind. And deaf, dumb and stupid, too. Sometimes willfully ignorant and often masochistic.  Oh, yeah, great poem, too. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!" |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Maureen, You write lonely with so much longing and beauty of words. I am so glad that I went back in time to find this. Alison |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Maureen The magic of morning between the first light of day and sunrise has long been a ritual for me : Brew coffee, open the pages of Pip, bring a steaming cup of morning heaven to my computer, do keyboard magic and see what Maureen has written while I slept. When and if you ever reach the stage of "when I could write" my friend, I"ll hang on your every word and maybe steal a line or two to stir the kettle of my own. I"d be happy to write the worst you can do. Hang in there, my friend, my heart, always next to yours. Jimmy |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What a wonderful format and style to compliment your thoughts here Maureen. I really enjoyed this. Skillfully written and very emotive. Much enjoyed. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Maureen...I can't find anything wrong with your writting. Really enjoyed the tenderness of this piece...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
Surely you will as this very apt description of that feeling is one all of us 'writers' can relate too Much enjoyed EmmaRose |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Well, you just proved that you can still write, Maureen. Ida |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
this is so beautifully written and skillfully done...just lovely! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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