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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
This rhyme sublime by design and for a time masticated berated abbreviated alleviated brought down to a bearable pace so it won't bring a frown to your face a tooled disgrace kicking sounds into space gonna cut to the chase divine benign profound got a thought to displace but I'm trying to decide if the theory has a place yours or mine override ride the tide this querie feeling eerie but I have a task to ask if you even want to hear me you've been dealt a hand understand? you're given one life to lead to live when you need do you give? don't you know? the gift it must flow like a sieve because for love to freight it to you like a train it's gotta go through you in the pain don't restrain an open hand so give to the poor remain the open door don't matter who's your kin who's the man don't flatter yourself with sin you've got one skin the one you're in and it isn't going with you it's discarded like a tissue who's left? the real issue who are you once it's started bereft by death and outsmarted and who you gonna be when your weak thin cage collapses a worn shoe it got old an outrage full of mold been sold down the river failed liver or a cancer from within relapses? shout it out let's hear a holler there's no doubt when a lout owns a dollar but when a rich dude drops dead Fred his last breath death gurgling one last shout he cackles like a hen at the knell of a bell when his eyes awake in hell what's his gold for which his soul was sold b'cuz he got the itches for the riches honey, what's his money gonna buy for him then? BOOYAH! © ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· 2011  Artist Unknown While any decent person would never want to see another person burning for eternity, I still rather like the idea of a Hell, because it ensures that the evil behavior of brutish, merciless, uncaring and reprobate men will never again be an issue to the innocent, in this life, or the next. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!" |
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mikeandrew Member
since 2010-11-18
Posts 198 |
Terrific work . |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Nice work. Sound like you have a real anger against people who have money. I maintain that the "poor" are just as sinful and greedy as the rich merely on a different plane. It's all according to the individual. ~ Clones are people two ~ |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Thanks for dropping in. No, I have absolutely no anger for the rich whatsoever. I simply adhere to the belief that the selfish, compassion-less, idolatrous, self-obsessed rich whose God is their money and whose focus is their stomaches while the poor go unfed have got all the reward they will ever have. This is not my perspective formulated by my own imagination, but it is one I agree with. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!" |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
I understand Michael Moore will be doing the orientation and Rosanne Barr will be singing the hymns ....and something about Joan Rivers nude reading War and Peace out and very loud.. enjoyed the rattle garapan..cool stuff |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
That's quite a rope to climb down. I enjoyed the replies and I appreciate the effort you put into this work. Why not just kill them rather than torture them? That would be the best answer. Greek mythology added to the good book the whole idea of a burning hell. The majority of major religions now days no longer support the notion because it's way to cruel and uncivilized but are we? That's the question.....smile Greed comes in all forms. I'm greedy to read poetry. With a beer and peanuts of course! Eric Love does not look after it's own interests. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Liked where you are coming from in this piece and the responses it evoked from the Blue Buffet. Good write! Lori |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is an excellent candidate for slam poetry. I can hear it being read on a big stage with a frenzied beat to it, bringing down the house.  As far as the idea goes, I have the same wishes when I see people do things that are evil, unkind, or detrimental to others, knowing that they will not be called on it in this lifetime. I whisper a wish that somewhere, sometime, they will be called for such actions and pay for them. I hope there really is a hell for them and, if they have to spend eternity burning, so much the better. |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
hahaha! Thanks, all. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!" |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
yep...that be slam kinda poetry...pretty cool, my friend...nice 'n smooth  There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Funny, XGarapanX.You say you have no anger for the rich and then go off of them immediately. Eric is right. Greed comes in many forms. ~ Clones are people two ~ |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The poem, not the poet. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
I quit. |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Don't quit Jerry. I am speaking of a specific category of rich people, not all rich people. Just as not every poor is innocent, as you point out, not every rich person has healthy motives. This poem is about greed, not nice rich people, of whom there are many, who give and give to every good cause. By implication, greed is the Topic, and those who amass wealth with this attitude are the ones who will find they have gained all they will ever have. A better person than I once said, "What does it profit a man to gain the world but lose his immortal soul?" Just as surely as this is a specific indictment, so is the subject of this poem. I have lots to say about goodly, generous rich people, just not in this piece. Your frustration is unnecessary. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!" |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
But yes, our good Balladeer points out rightly that a poem is just a poem and in this forum is judged for it's merit, not its originator, so I will refrain from debate any further except to point out what I did above, so you may hopefully understand and not be upset. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!" |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Ah, we are indeed all greedy. Some for money, some seek attention/love/happiness. and Some...probably the ones you portray in this, don't know when enough is enough, they are beyond greedy. Enjoyed. -Trina |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Now that you've mentioned it, that is so true! ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!" |
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