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A Waltz
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A Waltz |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Top-swirling mannequins Of fresh-pressed innocence Age of roses and savors sweet Tinting the handrails of virtue Like fine wine and yellow roses Captured on a canvass set alight Waltz-watchwords glide, then spin As tales of indulgence impale themselves On promises of sun-drenched lattice In gardens of color with greenery’s glow Like unwashed statues of aging stone Set mid the ballroom of finest bouquets Night-laden azures on fields of blue Welcome the dance steps of Top-swirling mannequins In fragrant perfumes |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Oh my, this is gorgeous and so very picturesque. So many great lines. Love the romance steavenr~ and this.... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Tinting the handrails of virtue ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ yea that!! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Blues, may I tell you a secret...that was my favorite line as well...thank you for reading and responding |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Excellence wordplay here, steavenr. You delight the senses and accentuate the heartstrings with your beautiful verses. Well done. ~ Why Do Gorillas Have Big Nostrils? / Because They Have Big Fingers. ~ |
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The_Doctors_Angel_32 Member
since 2011-01-14
Posts 337Florida, USA |
This is such a sweet poem. I could picture it in my mind.  When the family is together, the soul is at peace - Russian Proverb |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
JerryPat...wow...that is exceptionally high praise...I thank you kindly DocAngel, thank you for your kind comment...I was writing for imagery, so I really appreciate you noting it |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"Waltz-watchwords glide, then spin As tales of indulgence impale themselves On promises of sun-drenched lattice In gardens of color with greenery’s glow Like unwashed statues of aging stone Set mid the ballroom of finest bouquets" This is beautiful writing Steaven Love the serene nature of it. Eric Love does not look after it's own interests. |
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mikeandrew Member
since 2010-11-18
Posts 198 |
wonderful poem. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
The part I hate is that empty space after the last word - I wanted it to go on forever. Owl |
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rad802 Member
since 2008-04-19
Posts 279KY U.S.A. |
I am always looking for the ideas and sometimes miss the imagery. good write thanks |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Your words paint such a beautiful scene. Lovely. -Trina |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Eric, since imagery is the watchword of serenity, I am extremely gratified by your kind words mikeandrew, thank you for stopping by and commenting…I appreciate it awww…you’re so nice…thank you rad802, good for you ‘cause this was all about imagery and nothing about ideas…truth be told, wrote this while watching Martin Scorsese’s “Age of Innocence” with the impetus being the ballroom scenes …along with the garden scenes Trina, thank you. I consider your comments great compliments…glad you liked it |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
This poem painted a very beautiful picture in my mind steavenr. I enjoyed it very much. Ida |
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