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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2011-01-16 02:50 AM


Not yet upon the precipice
of floating free and clear
she's a woman, maybe me,
with laboured breath and footsteps.

The perfect goal and end of all
weighs heavy in her hands
but she knows to carry carefully
to ensure her place of comfort.

There's a clipboard on her back
like mindful awareness
of what she needs to do and be
to reach the finish line
together with her pen of ticks,
change of mind eraser,
and an over-sized cross-off bag
to hold her dreams and fantasies.

Thus weighted she's a traveller
towards the now unknown
and though she'd love to drop the crumbs
for you to follow on
she knows your appetite
doesn't lean towards her own.

She's a woman on a journey
with no free hands to wring a thought
as to how to free herself
from a heavy cross-off bag!

Helen / 16 January 2011


© Copyright 2011 Helen - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat
Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991
Louisiana/America
1 posted 2011-01-16 07:41 AM


Methinks this woman will make the journey just fine even with that infernal "heavy cross-off bag."

Nice work.

~ Why Do Gorillas Have Big Nostrils? / Because They Have Big Fingers. ~

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
2 posted 2011-01-16 11:09 AM


And still, you rise to the challenge beautifully.

Oh Helen, I clearly felt the struggle within.

Best to you this Sunday~

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
3 posted 2011-01-16 12:50 PM


Thanks, Jerry.  Yes, I guess we do what we have to do.

Bluesy - Thank you.  Always a struggle within especially when things don't go the way I think they should.  I'm learning not to think.  Gosh, I even forgot it was Sunday so I must be winning in the "not thinking" game.  

Helen

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
4 posted 2011-01-16 03:15 PM


I loved this...I could so relate...and you put it so well! I love your style here.
Lori

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
5 posted 2011-01-16 03:29 PM


Thank you so much, Lori.  
nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
6 posted 2011-01-16 07:02 PM


O'Boy, Helen. I have been trying this of late  "I'm learning not to think"... wish it would work better!



M

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