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faithmairee
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0 posted 2011-01-16 12:20 PM



momma, don't be angry
is it something that we did
momma, don't ignore us
as we climb on top your bed

momma, we are hungry
it is past time we were fed
momma, you can't feed us
if you don't get out of bed

we're just little children
and we do not understand
why you lie there staring
at our tiny outstretched hands

momma, please forgive us
you're so far away it seems
we're young and we don't know
just what nervous breakdown means

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

© Copyright 2011 Faith Elizabeth Brigham - All Rights Reserved
The_Doctors_Angel_32
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1 posted 2011-01-16 12:24 PM


I could feel the pain in this piece. It may be a nervous breakdown or a chemical imbalance of the brain. Went through something like this with my mom back in 1989. I truly enjoyed the read!!!

When the family is together, the soul is at peace - Russian Proverb


faithmairee
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2 posted 2011-01-16 12:34 PM


I wrote this poem based on my mother's account of a  real life experience during which time she spoke of us as having pulled her out of her sad state by begging her for peanut butter sandwiches.  

I am sorry to hear you experienced something similar with your mother.  I was much too young to remember what happened with my mom.  I do recall her repeating the story to me several times while I was growing up.

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

The_Doctors_Angel_32
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3 posted 2011-01-16 12:42 PM


Yeah my mom tries to forget about it. She ended up in a state mental hospital for awhile. I was 10 so I could not go in and visit like my Dad, brother and sister could. It is a sad memory.

When the family is together, the soul is at peace - Russian Proverb


JerryPat
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4 posted 2011-01-16 07:18 AM


The human condition, i.e., the brain, is such a complex organism it is a wonder it doesn't self-destruct more often than not. The Arizona shooter comes to mind.

~ Why Do Gorillas Have Big Nostrils? / Because They Have Big Fingers. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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5 posted 2011-01-16 03:41 PM


This really hits home.  Complex is right Jerry. Been there. The guilt you feel is an ongoing battle..even though at the time you were doing the best you could...its hard.
Lori

OwlSA
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6 posted 2011-01-16 03:58 PM


Faith, you have a really wonderful mom.  Like your mother through the spoken word, you through the written word, captured a seemingly insignificant moment and preserved it foreverm as well you may have done, for it was a most significant one.

Owl

Marchmadness
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7 posted 2011-01-18 02:50 AM


Sad and powerful write, faithmarie. Brought tears to my eyes.
                             Ida

ethome
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New Brunswick Canada
8 posted 2011-01-18 02:53 AM


Wow, this is just too sad but very well expressed here in your words Faith.

Eric

Love does not look after it's own interests.

faithmairee
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9 posted 2011-01-18 09:35 PM


Thank you all for stopping by and commenting on my poem.  

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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