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JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

0 posted 2011-01-15 04:48 PM

She turned to me
Sunset wasn't too far away
Sinking Sol highlighted her hair
Setting it on fire

You have a hunk of granite
for a heart, and
polluted sewer water for veins.

Lois, I think her name was Lois
Lay her head back on the pillow
Lazed out a low sigh
Looked back at me, trying for tears

What is it with youse guys,
catch a broad's eye
bed her and drop her?

I flicked my Ronson
Ignited a Camel
Ignored Lois
I think her name was Lois

I'm no tramp, ya know,
I got friends, buster,
friends that'll drop you in the river.

Smoked the Camel down to the nub
Said, "What'd you say your name was?"
Sage green were her eyes
She looked a little saddle sore

Aw, come on, big guy,
tell me them things you said last night,
you must be one of them poets.

"Take a fin outta my shirt pocket," I said, "get lost."
Tact is my middle name.
The empty bottle of
Tanqueray barely missed my head

Intolerant people are the people who do not believe the way we want them to, which makes us intolerant by default.â€”July 26, 2010

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

1 posted 2011-01-15 05:04 PM

Sounds like what you need is a better class of "dames."
Ida

JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

2 posted 2011-01-15 05:25 PM

No, Ida, I don't need a better class of dames. This was a takeoff of the old detective movies and books from the mid-forties. You know, a few weeks ago I was taken to task for getting personal with a poet about one of her poems. You are doing the same thing to me. I feel a strong resentment in your words as if you actually think this poem is how I am. It is spoof. Fiction. Thank you for whatever you think of me, that is your problem.

Intolerant people are the people who do not believe the way we want them to, which makes us intolerant by default.â€”July 26, 2010

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2011-01-15 07:52 PM

I am sorry, Jerry. I guess I missread you.
I did not mean to offend you.
Ida

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

4 posted 2011-01-15 09:47 PM

Fiction or not, I believe "dames" like that put their selfs in that position. I enjoyed the story.

-Trina
Be thankful for every person who has caused you pain. In that moment, they became your assistant of growth.

JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

5 posted 2011-01-15 09:49 PM

Thank you Trina.

Intolerant people are the people who do not believe the way we want them to, which makes us intolerant by default.â€”July 26, 2010

faithmairee
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since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

6 posted 2011-01-15 11:50 PM

this is really great...pretty cool take off...enjoyed it much!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

The_Doctors_Angel_32
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since 2011-01-14

Posts 337
Florida, USA

7 posted 2011-01-15 11:54 PM

I enjoyed this little tale of love spurned. You know some "dames" do put themselves into those situations but that ain't never gonna be me. LOL I truly enjoyed the read!!!

When the family is together, the soul is at peace - Russian Proverb

JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

8 posted 2011-01-16 06:08 AM

Thanks faith, The_Doctors_Angel_32 for being here.

~ Why Do Gorillas Have Big Nostrils? / Because They Have Big Fingers. ~

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

9 posted 2011-01-16 10:47 AM

I think the dame almost nailed this on the head...

A good take-off of the 40's...

JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

10 posted 2011-01-16 11:03 AM

I think so too, Sunshine. Thanks.

~ Why Do Gorillas Have Big Nostrils? / Because They Have Big Fingers. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

11 posted 2011-01-16 03:00 PM

Saw it in black and white like Casa Blanca...too cool Jerry!
Lori

JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

12 posted 2011-01-16 03:03 PM

Hah! That's the only way to capture this sort of memory. I still watch those old private eye movies, and even wrote one a couple of years ago called, "Ram Slade: Shamus."

Thanks Lori.

~ Why Do Gorillas Have Big Nostrils? / Because They Have Big Fingers. ~

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