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Sunshine
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0 posted 2011-01-14 07:18 PM



Sweet Wrath

You ask me where I’ve gone
altho I am still here in heart ~
you say it is not as it use to be,
sweet wrath tears our world apart…

how can it be, all this time spent;
in Heaven’s name, where is the love?
You ask where the love went,
ah sweet wrath, on wings of a dove…

the terror of your youth, the dying flame;
her course of action was not the same
as mine, for still here am I, your life,
still by your side, forever your wife.

Cannot you take the memory’s pain
and rid of it for sanity’s sake?
Oh sweet wrath come evening,
in the darkness I’ll lay awake…

Knowing that forever
here I will always be,
sweet wrath of thy heart
causes tender misery.


12 May, 2000
©KRJ


© Copyright 2011 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat
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1 posted 2011-01-14 08:05 PM


Bittersweet and reflective is this poem about the frantic thought that love and passion have found dark corners to secret themselves in.

So difficult to keep the heart throbbing one for the other when life and living and bills and . . . Well, things change. It has to, I believe. What is left after lust and high passion is . . . love, and there are those who cannot quite grasp this concept.

Nice feelings within this poem.

Intolerant people are the people who do not believe the way we want them to, which makes us intolerant by default.—July 26, 2010

BluesSerenade
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2 posted 2011-01-14 08:44 PM


You are such a gifted poetess, your heart on your sleeve becomes you, Karilea.

You write with such sensitivity and so often your poetry brings tears to my eyes,
at the same time it is always just as lovely as can be.

Amaryllis
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3 posted 2011-01-14 09:15 PM


Aw Karilea, this is very moving. So heartfelt and honest...yet I hear the patience and faith behind the words. It`s certainly a secret that many young couples (unfortunately) do not yet know...that if we ride out the storm waves and heck, even the tsunamis, our union will strengthen and deepen to an unprecedented degree.  Long-suffering love is very under-rated...I find it much more amazing and fulfilling than the fireworks of early passion!
Hang in there dear. I enjoyed this write...woman to woman, I...understand.  

All my best~
Amaryllis

faithmairee
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4 posted 2011-01-14 11:57 PM


a bittersweet and beautifully written poem...lovely work!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

OwlSA
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5 posted 2011-01-15 12:12 PM


Karilea I feel the pain in your poem and ache for you.  I hope that creating beauty of your pain, was carthartic, or that, at the very least, it alleviated the pain and the pressure for a while.  There is nothing lonelier than being with somebody with whom you are not.  You are a better woman than I am, Gunga Din.  I didn’t stay.  I left after 7 years of not being allowed to be me.  

Owl

Spiros Zafiris
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6 posted 2011-01-15 07:53 AM


..>>forgiveness and prayer helps a lot..>spiros
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7 posted 2011-01-15 07:59 AM


wonderful poem nicely worded in my opinion.
Lori Grosser Rhoden
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8 posted 2011-01-15 08:43 AM


The saddest part of all is how many hearts this touched with recognition...but in that there is comfort of understaning you are not alone.
Lori

ethome
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9 posted 2011-01-15 12:54 PM


Well Sunshine one, I have always known you to be of strong character and
true love cannot be found where it truly does not exist, nor can it be hidden where it truly does.

Excellent writing!

Eric


Love does not look after it's own interests.

The_Doctors_Angel_32
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10 posted 2011-01-15 01:34 PM


This is very beautifully written. It is like I could picture your pain in my mind as I read. I truly enjoyed this read!!!
Sunshine
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11 posted 2011-01-16 07:49 PM


I am always thrilled with poets
who accept me for who I am.

As for this poem?

It was a great reminder for me
at what has so quickly passed
in this last decade.

I'm pretty sure I can honestly say,
I'm glad I held on...
for better or worse,
through sickness and health.


JamesMichael
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12 posted 2011-01-17 10:16 PM


Nice...James
Rex Allen McCoy
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13 posted 2011-01-17 11:04 PM


Excellent piece and I like how you stick to your values

AlCowie
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14 posted 2011-05-16 09:51 AM


I love the way the poem creates a watercolour so that you have to imagine so much more than the poem gives whilst having the bounds of what is written to guide you.

Lovely

Martie
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15 posted 2011-05-17 01:22 PM


Sissie...poignant in emotion, musical in delivery....beautifully written!!
Brian James
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16 posted 2011-05-17 03:01 PM


This is so beautiful, Sunshine.  I haven't read one of your poems in years, I believe, and it's nice to.

I love in particular how you start and end on that familiar note, the "I'll always be here," but by the time the poem is over you've added a bit of a dark dimension to it.  You're speaking less to the other person and more to yourself.  "This is where I will be always."  It seems to have a blend of commitment and resignation that's really soul-stirring.

That's what I got from it, at least.  I love your poetry.  Nice reading from you.

"To me, the thing that art does for life is to clean it, to strip it to form."
~Robert Frost

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