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At the Gravesite
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At the Gravesite |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America 
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colder'n blue blazes preacher standing ramrod straight mouth so cold lips turning blue mouthing verses mouthing verses nobody hears after he speaks them and words pass his mouth only to shatter in the cold, graveyard cold I'm dressed warm not warm enough to stop chattering teeth shivering not all from the wintry blast no their eyes looking at me instead of the preacher even the preacher presented me with a glacial sneer before he started mouthing verses no one hears not supposed to be here I don't care Hungry panther couldn't keep me away I loved her More than anyone did even her husband especially him preacher stopped mouthing silence two strangers walked to flag-draped coffin took it stood in front of the husband she was a veteran folding the flag to precise specifications every fold means something so I've been told the two armed service guys presented the flag to the husband everyone stood whispered among themselves hate-filled eyes darting toward me I remained sitting not part of the ritual would not pretend I was they all left eventually only I remained two men showed up to fill the grave I held up a hand They stepped back I rose and walked toward where she lay knelt at the foot of it tried to speak couldn't tried to pray I couldn't do that either one of the grave men coughed I got up wiped at the tears I left leaving my heart at the bottom of that hole Suicidal twin kills sister by mistake! |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
this one nearly brought me to tears...that's how moved i was by it...a profound and expertly penned poem! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Looks like it is just you and I tonight, faith, and I'm sipping on a glass of vino and getting ready for bed. Thank you for your overly kind words and I will see you tomorrow if permitted. Suicidal twin kills sister by mistake! |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Very touching Jerry. You know how to move a person with your poetry.I once told a person he could not die before I did as I would not be able to atten his funeral and not shed a tear. He said he was thinking of the same thing.So we agreed we would not attend each other's service no matter which of us went first. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
I appreciate that you are reading my postings and commenting on them, latearrival. You and your friend have cinched quite a pack with your agreement. I see a novel forming inside my head using that as a plot. Thanks. Suicidal twin kills sister by mistake! |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
This is heart breaking. Beautifully expressed. -Trina |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Thank you Trina. Life . . and . . . death sometimes just isn't fair. Suicidal twin kills sister by mistake! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You captured the emotion so well Jerry The conflict made this realistic and something many can relate to. Many twists and turns to take on this ride through life's experiences. However, that doesn't erase the genuine feelings of deeply loving someone. Enjoyed thoroughly! Eric |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Jerry you play a sad tune on the heartstrings my friend. Had to blink back the tears on this one. Lori |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
well strummed jp... |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Appreciate your thoughts, Eric. Sometimes I get the feeling that the whole world is a stage (who said that, the bard from England?) and we really have no say in the speaking, action or thought processes, but are merely moving, doing and speaking as the puppeteer pulls our strings. Of course when that happens I realize that I am truly have acid flashback like everyone told me I would have in years to come. <><><> Lori, thank you for the show of emotion. <><><> I'm strumming, DS, but sometimes the instrument is out of tune. Thanks. Suicidal twin kills sister by mistake! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Very poignant, Jerry. Thank you for sharing such a personal scene. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Thank YOU, Sunshine, for being here. You bring a ray of . . . Oh no, surely I won't say that . . . Hahaha!! Suicidal twin kills sister by mistake! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
this is such a powerful write...I kept hearing these words as I read through it: "mouthing verses no one hears" ...the tragedy of truth is so intense...enjoyed |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Thank you for your very nice comment, steavenr, it is very much appreciated. Suicidal twin kills sister by mistake! |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Wow! This is a powerful write, Brought tears to my eyes. Ida |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Hello Ida, and thank you for reading and commenting on my poetry. Suicidal twin kills sister by mistake! |
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