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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
crucial daggers thrust though crevasses of my soul like arrows piercing tea-time toasts on a cloudy day words, they hurt so much inflicting pain creating doubts like ice cubes sizzling on a hot iron grill leaving only the splatter of fresh-seared flesh |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
That was intense! the imagery was amazing! Lori |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Steaven, I understand this one too well and wish that I didn't. Once the flesh is seared, it always wears the scar. Thank you for speaking about a healing part of me. Alison |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Not much left after that grilling, is there? Like Lori said, intense work. Suicidal twin kills sister by mistake! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Lori, thank you for picking up on the essence of this write…it is greatly appreciated Alison, real life events might make for relatable writing, but they surely share pain, do they not? Thanks for reading and responding JerryPat, not much more than memories, pain and…at the same time…hope. Thank you for your kind comments |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Whew, this is graphic and vivid! Really felt the hurt. Eric |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Ah, but the flesh will heal, and become stronger.  Enjoyed.-Trina. |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
this is really great...wonderful diction and imagery with a nice delivery... There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Eric, thank you for comments and the empathy…appreciated Trina (May I call you by your name & not your username?) …my feelings exactly…thank you for your keen observations faithm, you are much too kind with such generous and gracious remarks…but, I will take them  |
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