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ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

0 posted 2011-01-10 12:42 PM

Like a devoted singer clings to rhyme,
with words as precious as the spice of youth,
my love, made sure by feelings divine,
lives within the mercy of the warmth of you
whether I'm thoughtless, loving, or stained, or clean,
or searching my own faults, or none, or more,
regardless of the flight of past scenes
I give my heart invested in your worth.
So since I am not dead, sick, nor denied
such is this virtue where my substance is.
Might I then cry indebted while alive
to be a part of your uncommon gift.
So what is left, is left for you to see
This love I live, much more for you than me.

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

1 posted 2011-01-10 01:15 PM

"So what is left, is left for you to see
This love I live, much more for you than me"

I loved your ending...please, tell me...do you think you have to live to learn this, or learn to live this? I've pondered it...just not sure if I've come up with the answer...

So related to your very fine words...thanks for sharing

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

2 posted 2011-01-10 01:32 PM

Thanks Steaven I appreciate the visit and the positive comments.

Answer, BOTH! ....grin.....

Eric

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

3 posted 2011-01-10 02:57 PM

Very nice Eric, your last lines did it.
Lori

JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

4 posted 2011-01-10 03:06 PM

Opening our hearts and thoughts to the ones we love is a difficult thing to do for a lot of us. I'm not exactly sure why that is, but it seems to be so. So, after saying that, I can say that this is a very delicate and profound piece of baring of the heart.

Suicidal twin kills sister by mistake!

faithmairee
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since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

5 posted 2011-01-10 06:52 PM

great diction and flow to this profound poem...beautifully expressed, Eric!

Faith

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

6 posted 2011-01-10 07:16 PM

Awesome sentiments well expressed.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

7 posted 2011-01-10 07:25 PM

Thank you Lori.
Glad there was saomething there to bring it all home.

Eric

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Jerry

Yep, you're so right. Don't know why that is but it makes withdrawn a popular choice.
Thanks for the great input and comments

Eric

Siamese twins move to England so the other one can learn how to drive!

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

8 posted 2011-01-10 07:27 PM

Many thanks Faith I appreciate the kind enthusiastic reply.

Eric

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Garapan
I appreciate that. Thanks for the visit and the read.

Eric

Siamese twins move to England so the other one can learn how to drive!

mikeandrew
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since 2010-11-18

Posts 198

9 posted 2011-01-11 12:38 PM

really great poem i enjoyed reading this poem.

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

10 posted 2011-01-11 02:15 AM

Thank you mike I'm glad you did.

Eric

Siamese twins move to England so the other one can learn how to drive!

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

11 posted 2011-01-11 03:23 AM

quote:
I give my heart invested in your worth....
...This love I live, much more for you than me.

Aren't you the sweetest thang

Made me smile. Enjoyed.

-Trina.

When you decide to walk away- walk away. Don't look back, In that moment you'll lose trust and faith- in yourself.

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

12 posted 2011-01-11 07:34 AM

Thanks Trina I appreciate the visit and comment.

I'm just an oldie trying to be a goldie............

Eric

Siamese twins move to England so the other one can learn how to drive!

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

13 posted 2011-01-13 07:01 PM

Fine writing...James

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

14 posted 2011-01-14 02:09 AM

Thak you James, I appreciate the comment.

Eric

Love does not look after it's own interests.

CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

15 posted 2011-06-26 09:41 PM

Oh gosh I can't believe I found this jewel... Thanx for sharing ~Coco~

martiniat8
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since 2003-06-21

Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

16 posted 2011-06-27 01:56 AM

REALLY like this line...
"Like a devoted singer clings to rhyme,"

Martie

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California

17 posted 2011-06-27 10:01 PM

Eric...so loving. Thank you for sharing this piece of deep feeling.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

18 posted 2011-06-27 10:23 PM

I've not read a better poem with the subject of love.

~ All those who believe in telekinesis, raise my hand. ~

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