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Amberzlynnc
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since 2010-08-24
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0 posted 2011-01-09 12:34 PM



Quickly and simply, you’ve done it once more,
Slipped into my mind, as you have before.
Just a gentle hug and a shy ‘hello’,
And you’re back in my thoughts, as you were long ago.

Our first night together is filled with rapport,
and quickly and simply, you’ve done it once more.
You’ve twisted my mind and left me confused,
but come morning light, once again you’re my muse.

Gentle kisses and limbs intertwined under sheets,
make it hard to resist our intimate heat.
Quickly and simply, you’ve done it once more,
just like in the past, sending chills through my core.

Eternalized in journals, night after night,
You’ll remain on these pages you’ve caused me to write.
You inscrutable man, you’ve left me unsure... of how
quickly and simply, you’ve done it once more.

*Amber

© Copyright 2011 Amber Corcoran - All Rights Reserved
Bastet
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since 2010-05-07
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1 posted 2011-01-09 04:14 AM


Although I'm not generally a fan of rhyme, I love this poem. You have a light touch,a delicate sensitivity. It's as if you've woven a lovely lace pattern with words. The rhymes and repetitions are tasteful and well-balanced. Bravo!
XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19
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2 posted 2011-01-09 05:00 AM


Yes, as the poet above mentioned you have made the simple rhyme scheme work wonderfully. The story is easy to follow and is a complete delight. Thank you!

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·  "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

Legacy
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since 2011-01-08
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Louisiana
3 posted 2011-01-09 05:51 AM


Grinning about the "you’ve done it once more" scenario.
Amberzlynnc
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4 posted 2011-01-09 12:44 PM


Thank you everyone.
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