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steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

0 posted 2011-01-08 05:25 PM

shadowy sights and vibrant sounds
of lace-work tatted in periwinkle
nettings of ivory-baked invitations
to venues of exclusive inclusions

I do’s aplenty abound
from the giving to the taking
as lives unshared meld into one

to synchronize the shadows
of love’s lengthening cast

into the souls and hearts of lovers

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2011-01-08 08:07 PM

to synchronize the shadows
of love’s lengthening cast

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

That is one of the prettiest things I've ever read.
Your thoughts are not showy or wordy and certainly not overdone,
they just feel so right an so comfortable.

Good on ya, good poet~

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

2 posted 2011-01-08 09:22 PM

Blues, I am overwhelmed by your kind and generous remarks...thank you (this one is one trying to describe my youngest daughter's upcoming wedding)

XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

3 posted 2011-01-08 10:59 PM

What she said. I truly enjoy when a poem says just enough in just the right way. This does so expertly.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

faithmairee
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since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

4 posted 2011-01-09 12:36 PM

this is so beautifully written...i enjoyed it alot! nice work!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

5 posted 2011-05-24 12:37 PM

Lovely writing! A precious read... ~Coco~

Alison

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since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

6 posted 2011-05-24 02:47 AM

This is beautiful. Very beautiful, Steaven.

Alison

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

7 posted 2011-05-24 07:37 AM

"lace-work tatted in periwinkle" lovely descriptions Steaven...congratulations on the upcoming~~

M

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

8 posted 2011-05-24 10:54 AM

Nice wordplay without shooting off fireworks, just let the words "speak" for themselves.

~ I went to a restaurant that serves "breakfast at any time" / I ordered French Toast during the Renaissance ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

9 posted 2011-05-24 11:19 AM

I'm with everyone else on this beauty Steaven..great job!
Lori

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

10 posted 2011-05-25 02:08 AM

What a special gift for your daughter to hold in her heart forever, Steaven.
Ida

AlCowie
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since 2011-05-13

Posts 92
London, UK

11 posted 2011-05-25 05:52 AM

Serene, lots of like

Angel4aKing
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since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

12 posted 2011-05-25 10:16 PM

to synchronize the shadows
of love’s lengthening cast

into the souls and hearts of lovers

Nicely put!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

callalily
Junior Member

since 2011-05-22

Posts 22

13 posted 2011-05-27 11:57 AM

a beautiful scene..love the images I pictured..your word choices are stellar here

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

14 posted 2011-05-27 12:29 PM

I am sure this was your daughter's most favourite, favourite wedding present. She is very lucky to have you as a father - and a poet to boot, Steaven!

Owl

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

15 posted 2011-05-27 06:15 PM

Lovely heart sounds written here, Stevenr.

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

16 posted 2011-05-27 07:38 PM

I remember writing things for my daughter's wedding . . . seems I never got it quite the way I wanted it...seems you may have, though, my friend.

enjoyed.

j.

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

17 posted 2011-05-30 10:46 AM

Garapan, thank you for the oh so kind and generous comment. I, like you, believe that clarity should be the essence of brevity.

faith, thank you very much

Coco, you are very kind. (love your font choice!)

Alison, I thank you…but, I must admit…it is easier to write beautifully when your subject is beautiful…and my daughter truly is

Miss M, thank you for choosing to comment on that line…sorry I did not get back to this until so long after the wedding

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

18 posted 2011-05-30 11:05 AM

Jerry, thank you…and while I do love fireworks, I have always enjoyed the role of observer

Lori, I appreciate your reading and commenting

Ida, thank you…she is a special daughter (but then, I might be a tad biased)

Al, thank you…serene is a good place to be

kingsangel, thank you…sort of just came out that way…I am glad you liked it

callalily, your comments are very generous…thank you

Owl, thank you. You are so kind, but her favorite present was when I presented her to be married.

Martie, thank you…that was exactly what I was trying to get across…heart sounds (I like that) …heart sounds…smiles

jwesley, but have you not learned one of the great principles of life? Fathers are always in the right when it comes to their daughters…I am sure you got it right. Thank you for the glowing comment, though.

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