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faithmairee
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since 2011-01-05
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Poe Haven, USA

0 posted 2011-01-08 11:43 AM



the guy who's doing the books
is forever following around
the guy who does the printing
who is following around
the pretty girl
who answers the telephone
to see what the deal is with her
because there just might
be something more than
photos developing between
them in the darkroom

but the secretary, who
is tall and thin
and looks like a model
understands the way things are
and is one smart cookie
who knows the owner
is an even smarter one
who doesn't much like
socializing in the office
so she tries to act aloof
around the printer
who is prone to play
the fool for her

nevertheless, she's already taken
but can't make up her mind
if she wants to stay
that way or not because
marriage ain't so hot to her
(but they don't that) and
everyone---except maybe the secretary
seems to be acting a little nervous

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

© Copyright 2011 Faith Elizabeth Brigham - All Rights Reserved
XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19
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Antarctica
1 posted 2011-01-08 02:04 PM


Entertaining. I adore the way it's cinched up in the final line. Excellent.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·  "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

faithmairee
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Poe Haven, USA
2 posted 2011-01-08 02:22 PM


Thank you for your wonderful comments on my poem.  I'm glad you enjoyed it!


Faith

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
3 posted 2011-01-08 03:13 PM


Way to tell the tale and the ending is killer!
Lori

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
4 posted 2011-01-08 03:20 PM


He he I like the ending of this.
Don't know if I can find that secretary's cell number or not.
I want to do an inside job!

Eric

ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call
and kinda driftin away from it all

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
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West Coast
5 posted 2011-01-08 03:27 PM


ms faith...I think I know her...

from her smile...cool stuff ms

faithmairee
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since 2011-01-05
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Poe Haven, USA
6 posted 2011-01-09 12:11 PM


Lori-Thanks so much!   I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Eric-Sorry... me thinks that cell is a private one! lol

Dark Stranger-Gawd, you are good...I mean very good...who wouldv'e thought the smile was a dead give away....

Glad you enjoyed my poem! (Smiling)

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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