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faithmairee
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0 posted 2011-01-07 05:16 PM



i could've been you
if i were your age
in the current day
yes, you with the hair
in purposeful disarry
ring in one nostril
and ever so cautious
look in your eyes

i feel your pain
not in precisely
the same way you do
but i've been on
the edge of terror before
and when all is said and done
the fact remains i could've
been you (believe me, baby)
i know because i've been
where you have been

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

© Copyright 2011 Faith Elizabeth Brigham - All Rights Reserved
Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
1 posted 2011-01-07 05:24 PM


guess we could have each been another if the cards were dealt that way...I would have chosen to be a junk yard dog I think...guarding a herd of edsels...

enjoyed your thoughts ms

faithmairee
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2 posted 2011-01-07 05:30 PM


a junk yard dog guarding edsels?  i knew there was something i liked about you (wink) ...i love dogs and edsels are the best! glad you stopped by and i do appreciate you leaving your paw prints on my page (big smile)

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

Quiet One
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Shhhhh
3 posted 2011-01-08 04:12 PM


Very few trend setters out there ... at any age, we just try to fit in
JamesMichael
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4 posted 2011-01-08 05:55 PM


Enjoyed...James
XGarapanX
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Antarctica
5 posted 2011-01-08 10:56 PM


This is a sage and telling insight into a younger persons life. Great work.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·  "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

Legacy
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since 2011-01-08
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Louisiana
6 posted 2011-01-08 11:00 PM


We are all rebels at one point in time, even the meekest of us have rebel thoughts whether they shout it out or keep it inside.
faithmairee
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7 posted 2011-01-08 11:54 PM


thank you all so much for your comments on my poem...i appreciate them all

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
8 posted 2011-01-11 08:41 AM


I can relate to this! good write.
Lori

latearrival
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since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499
Florida
9 posted 2011-01-11 09:40 PM


If we do not have real trend setters we will not have any leaders either. My brother was a leader.In junior high in 1945 he had my mom curl his hair with a curling iron. The next day most of the boys came to school with curly hair.Then he got a crew cut and you guessed it~~~ His math teacher still had his class photo on her desk when I went there three years later. He was a hard act for my youger  brother and I to follow. latearrival
faithmairee
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Poe Haven, USA
10 posted 2011-01-11 09:58 PM


thank you Lori and latearrival for your comments on my poem

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

Sunshine
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11 posted 2011-01-11 10:02 PM


Faith? I would have been a horse...
or a cat...or that particular gal over there
in the corner who knows how to wink
just so...but she would have been...well,
I would have been a horse, I think, after all.




faithmairee
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Poe Haven, USA
12 posted 2011-01-11 10:06 PM


thank you, Lori!  glad you liked it.

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
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So. El Monte, California
13 posted 2011-01-12 10:01 PM


I think, in the end we all wind up being just who we were meant to be and you were clearly meant to be a poet.
                            Ida

faithmairee
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Poe Haven, USA
14 posted 2011-01-12 10:14 PM


Sunshine-Aha, A horse! WEll, I myself would be a dog...a big, friendly one!

MarchMadness-Thank you so much for your wonderful remarks.  I really appreciate them!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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