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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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0 posted 2011-01-06 12:34 PM




Sometimes the words won’t come easy
Sometimes they refuse to surface at all
Tongue tied thoughts stammer
Trying to speak free
But
Timidly they hide behind walls
Of what will they think of me

LGR(C)1/6/11

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faithmairee
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1 posted 2011-01-06 12:45 PM


i like it! very nicely expressed

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

ethome
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2 posted 2011-01-06 12:54 PM


Yeah, that's what happens isn't it?
The idea of certain kinds of rejection is a tough thing to face.
Imagine how many things would have changed if certain individuals that had a thing for someone else weren't too shy to approach them.
Whole new ball game.

Too true Lori and a nice write once again.

Eric

ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call
and kinda driftin away from it all

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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3 posted 2011-01-06 01:02 PM


faithmairee-thanks for checking my stuff out, glad you liked.
__________________________________________
Eric-thanks for the commentary it is always appreciated
Lori

latearrival
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4 posted 2011-01-06 01:32 PM


you expressed it well.So many of us have gone through this. latearrival.
JerryPat
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5 posted 2011-01-06 02:54 PM


Hi Lori. This is the perfect example of someone being their own worst enemy. Good writing.

~ Intolerant people are the people who do not believe the way we want them to,
which makes us intolerant by default.—July 26, 2010 ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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6 posted 2011-01-06 04:10 PM


Hey Jerry, worst enemy in that one worries too much about what other people think?
Rex Allen McCoy
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7 posted 2011-01-06 04:18 PM


if we paint our words, they will infect our makeup

AlCowie
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8 posted 2011-05-16 09:13 AM


I like the staccato effect of the hard d's and t's to make the end of the poem sound like a stammering thought, delicious!

Al

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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9 posted 2011-05-16 09:17 AM


Thank you very much Al for your comment.   Glad you liked it.
Lori

Marchmadness
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10 posted 2011-05-18 01:10 AM


I think most people fear rejection in one way or another, Lori. Always enjoy your thoughts.
                         Ida

Klassy Lassy
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11 posted 2011-05-18 08:22 PM


Lori, I struggle with this kind of silence, too.  It's not a quiet kind, is it?     ~Karen
ice
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12 posted 2011-05-19 07:31 AM


Yup, Yup, True dat!

Short song, but sung by everyone at times.
enjoyed

Sunshine
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13 posted 2011-05-19 09:46 AM


And that's when my hands start talking for me!

Excellent!


Margherita
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14 posted 2011-05-19 10:04 AM


Very true! Well done, dear Lori. I like to think that I am totally independent of the thoughts of others with regard to my expressions, but the doubts do creep in at times.

Just this morning I had an experience of this kind and I was able to trust myself in the end. For the first time in my life I have read a poem in front of a public. And the occasion was a funeral! I had loved the sweet old lady who has gone home and so I listened to my heart and wrote a poem for her. The priest was about to say "Ite missa est" when I found my courage and asked for a moment of attention to read my poem to my friend Ermelinda and to the assembly. I am glad I did, it felt all right. I think the majority appreciated it ...

Love,
Margherita


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