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Honeybunch
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0 posted 2011-01-04 05:44 AM


I let it be, indeed I did,
that break-out from beneath the skin
and let it view the world at large
from the safety of my eyes.

It stayed a while to look at you
and see how nature sparkled so
when viewed by one entwined
with the tendrils of delight.

But it leaked, you know, like break-outs do
on the brims and down the cheeks
because I think it knew right then
days of safety count down, down.

And so they did and so it slid
down channels of pure agony
into a pool of lethargy
to float again as one dismissed.

I feel it sometimes, yes, I do,
build muscle to escape the pool
and it thrashes like the wild untamed
down there beneath the skin.

But no, no, no; there's no way up
when agony has smoothed the walls
that once held the solid handholds
of the need to be and see.

And so it floats to death's dark gate
a break-out that not ere again
can climb unbidden from within
to the safety of my eyes!

Helen / 4 January 2011

[This message has been edited by Honeybunch (01-04-2011 07:45 AM).]

© Copyright 2011 Helen - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat
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1 posted 2011-01-04 07:17 AM


It seems, Helen, that we both are on the same nostalgic wavelength this morning. I am well aware of the pain and suffering we cause one another when "love" begins to disintegrate. Words are hurled, which can never be forgiven even though we say we forgive. I enjoyed this, as I do all of your searching poetry.

When early morning quietness seeps into my being
it's like I'm being hugged by everything good in the world.�August 16, 2010

Honeybunch
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2 posted 2011-01-04 07:52 AM


Thanks, Jerry.  I sure was being nostalgic but not totally as you describe.  No harsh words, etc. etc. but just the knowing of something so beautiful that never lived up to its truth.  Can't actually describe it better than that without being straightforward - and I am, of course, a story teller.


JerryPat
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3 posted 2011-01-04 08:12 AM


Sorry, Helen. Just seemed that way to me. I've been sick for four days, maybe that clouded my perception.

When early morning quietness seeps into my being
it's like I'm being hugged by everything good in the world.—August 16, 2010

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
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By the Seaside
4 posted 2011-01-04 08:31 PM


This goes straight to my heart and grabs it in a choke hold.

Saddness is not an easy emotion...
But you sure do write it well, honey girl~


Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
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5 posted 2011-01-05 04:50 AM


Very sad, but so well written, Helen.
                                Ida

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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since 2003-10-26
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Watertown, NY
6 posted 2011-01-05 07:46 AM


While i read this, it seemed to describe tears of sadness....one could describe tears as a break out I suppose....something that you try to conceal...to eh, "fight"... Enjoyed.

-Trina.

When you decide to walk away- walk away.  Don't look back, In that moment you'll lose trust and faith- in yourself.

Honeybunch
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7 posted 2011-01-05 08:01 AM


Thanks everyone.  Was just the "soul" or "the spirit of one" breaking out from beneath the flesh and viewing and crying from out my eyes.       
ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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New Brunswick Canada
8 posted 2011-01-05 02:25 PM


Helen
You have this amazing ability to step out from behind your gaurd through a poem and face the reality of your thoughts.
However, I have read/seen the warm side of you and know there's a deeply sensitive person there that loves dearly.
This has such wonderful metaphors and it opens the reader's perception of hopelesness to another realm.

As you spin these off I realize you have a great love for poetic expression.

Eric

ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call
and kinda driftin away from it all

Honeybunch
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9 posted 2011-01-05 03:12 PM


Thank you, dear Eric. Yes, I guess I do "spin them off", don't I, but one has got to be quick, you know, before the moment passes and remains forever unacknowledged.  They are my moments (although sometimes I'm not sure about that) and I do love weaving them into a story perhaps just to make them real in an unreal world - would take too long to explain that statement.

I do have many sad moments (wow, an admission from me - see what you've done - but, although of a serious disposition, I'm not a ... misery.

I love, yes.  I'm guarded, yes, because sometimes my sensitivity (yes, I'm sensitive) picks up what others are really feeling and that makes interaction difficult.  It's hard sometimes to be free and easy when bombarded by the ... unseen.  It's not like I can switch it off either - it just happens.

I didn't need to say all this, did I?  Just felt I needed to - HA! - to make myself real.     

For all that life is great!  

Helen  



Martie
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10 posted 2011-01-05 06:45 PM


Helen....It is good for the spirit to break out of the confines of the human heart and speak the truth.  I think that is what you do many times in your poetry and that's a good thing.  And this...

"one has got to be quick, you know, before the moment passes and remains forever unacknowledged."  So true!

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
11 posted 2011-01-05 07:50 PM


I am glad that you release...
it helps me!




steavenr
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12 posted 2011-01-08 12:24 PM


When I first read this, I thought that I was tuned in to what you were saying, but then I began to get eager to dismiss my interpretations...this is such a lovely, touching write...then I read your replies to others and I took comfort in that initial understanding...thank you for sharing this...it is exquisite...oh, and my favorite stanza is this one:

"And so they did and so it slid
down channels of pure agony
into a pool of lethargy
to float again as one dismissed."

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
13 posted 2011-01-08 01:21 PM


Martie, Sunshine & steavenr - Thank you so much.  It's so nice when my stories are understood and equally so when they help others.  Different countries, different lifestyles but at the core we are so similar.  Getting to the core is the difficult part though for a lot of us.


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