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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America 
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fear snuck in it had been hid until now it smiles and then it grins I have to wipe my fevered brow fear I refuse entrance, I won't allow it wants to torture me for things I did back then this time fear will not find me I avow I am not like I was back when living for pills and gin please tell me how blank out sin its twin tear When early morning quietness seeps into my being it's like I'm being hugged by everything good in the world.—August 16, 2010 |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Kind of diamond shaped, it is.  Carbon under pressure...thank you for posting this.  (I was particularly struck by the thought that in a white diamond, flaws refract in rays of blue, most predominently.)Much enjoyed. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Flaws in diamonds bring out the blue(s). That is righteous thinking. Thanks for being here, Serenity. When early morning quietness seeps into my being |
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mikeandrew Member
since 2010-11-18
Posts 198 |
Thats really creative i never seen this before. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Thanks Andrew. It is a French style call "The Diatelle," and isn't nearly as complicated as it appears. When early morning quietness seeps into my being |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I'm glad you did post this, it is wonderful. The topic is near and dear to my healing heart. Lori |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Appreciate the kind words, Lori, and I hope that heart is well on its way to being all new once again. Born Free........Taxed to Death |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Looks a lot like that Jewish top Serenity wrote about a while ago. Well, there now, you can tell she has much more class than me. Really like the positive nature of the thoughts in this one. Ta heck with fear let's have another beer! Jus kiddin Good stuff! Jerry ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
"Jus kiddin" I'll take you up on that, and I haven't had a beer in over twenty years, Eric. thanks for being here. Born Free........Taxed to Death |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
what!! You mean to say you have skeletons in your closet???  I think this is a good honest poem...sometimes we just need to purge. I'm not the same as I used to be either, and that's a good thing. Always nice to read you, JP~ |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
I don't have all that many skeleton's in my closet, Blues, I have outed most of them through poetry and my infamous memoir. There are still a few left hiding in corners, but I'll get to them sooner or later. Thank you for being here. Born Free........Taxed to Death |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Each one that comes out could inspire a new work...Ya never know. Eric ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
As mentioned this flawed diamond sprarkles. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Thank you Eric. <><><> Nice to see you here, Earl, and thank you. Suicidal twin kills sister by mistake! |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
this is just wonderful...thought-provoking and deep...great poem! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Okay! This is it. I'm gone. Bedtime. Thank you, faith. G'night. Suicidal twin kills sister by mistake! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
this is so good on so many levels...its form, its content, its message, its pathos...well written...as far as your question, someone once said that a clear conscious and a life once lived seldom, rarely meet (or something like that) |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
my pleasure, JerryPat...goodnight to you! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
That is a profound statement, steavenr, about a clear conscious and life. thanks for reading and commenting on my effort. Suicidal twin kills sister by mistake! |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
You, my friend, never cease to amaze. Enjoyed. -Trina |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
I love this poem JerryPat, both form and content. not easily done... |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Trina, thank you so much for your kind words. <><><> I am very happy you found my poem to your liking, Lady, thank you very much. "Whoever is not in his coffin and the dark grave let him know he has enough."-Robert Goolrick from "Reliable Wife" |
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