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Tomer
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since 2002-06-28
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Michigan

0 posted 2011-01-03 01:00 PM



I watched the doors to the backyard
The trees just above the secret garden
Where their young hands use to move time

The music lending its ears
To the way their feet
Would shuffle through the dirt

Her little ponytail
Like the smallest hairs on the canyon
Bristling with the wind to the north of their home

His eyes, aqua stare
Watching her move her thumbs
As if she was tying the knot of time in one
So their game of hide and go seek
Could last and last

Until the night came
With their eyes stunting the porch light
His arm around her shoulders
The tiny dancer,
With her fingers wrapped around his
And the night slowly listened

Their silhouette off the back porch door.

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ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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New Brunswick Canada
1 posted 2011-01-03 05:03 PM


Beautifully romantic in a unique poetic way.
The scene is pictured in such a homey way even though poetic relanguage is used.
A very very good write.

Eric

ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call
and kinda driftin away from it all

Tomer
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since 2002-06-28
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2 posted 2011-01-03 09:01 PM


Thanks, Eric...sometimes I wish I could go back but then I realize those times weren't so grand after all...

Cheers

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2011-01-04 07:39 PM


wonderful...James
Tomer
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4 posted 2011-01-04 11:16 PM


Thanks, James..hope all is well

Tomer

CocoBaci
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5 posted 2011-05-22 01:26 PM


Enjoyed...  
*~Coco~*

Tomer
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6 posted 2011-05-23 01:04 PM


Thanks, Coco...take care

Cheers

callalily
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since 2011-05-22
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7 posted 2011-05-23 08:46 PM



your images are wonderful

Tomer
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since 2002-06-28
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8 posted 2011-05-24 09:58 AM


Thanks for the kind words, callalily.  Happy you enjoyed

Cheers

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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Spring, Texas
9 posted 2011-05-24 02:18 PM


could see it all my friend, in mind and memory...well done.

j.

Tomer
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since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168
Michigan
10 posted 2011-05-24 06:05 PM


Thanks, J..appreciate the support..hope you're doing well

Tomer

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