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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London 
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~~~ Hiking through a woodland glen as mellow shards of sunset bend to capture bright in waters clear reflections caught from mountains shear The silhouette sings twilight's best Enchanting beauty north by west 'Twas then my heart forgot to beat while visions to my gaze complete A gentle sigh resets its rhythm I step toward this face from heaven ~ In twilight's eerie haze she stood amongst the tranquil shades of wood where timeless paths bestow the land she beckons with extended hand Surroundings waver hardly seen I spring a trap laid there between Then falling deep to darkest dread Above ... the trap once more is spread ~ I tumble blind through timeless mist as things unseen tear clothes to bits Attesting shrieks bare blackest dreams When fingers grab they choke the screams I'm lifted tossed to brink of ledge I scramble safely back from edge Breath wheezed ... lungs filled ... sanguine air but shadows dance to flame's despair ~ Perusing cavern round about entwined with scents of mash and stout The shadows fade as faces bare Their eyes unblinking strangely stare Just who they be I have no clue In cloaks of rag bereft of shoe A boiling pot spills overflows Aroma wafts to pull my nose ~ As grumbles strike beneath my chest a bowl they pass I say my blest The taste is odd but strangely good Then laughs coalesce beneath their hood It strikes me now this tale I'm told just echoed back from memories cold Beware the pit from beauty set Where mortal feet tread with regret ~ I sense the danger lurking near Too late I'm thrust through worlds of cheer Round about with no control Immersed in love then stripped of soul Tears of pleasure tears of pain Round about and back again Conscious whirling twisting vain Blackness lifting Drenched with rain ~ Hiking through a woodland glen as mellow shards of sunset bend to capture bright in waters clear reflections caught from mountains shear The silhouette sings twilight's best Enchanting beauty north by west 'Twas then my heart forgot to beat as visions through my haze complete A pondered thought sends senses reeling 'tis Déjà vu ... I've got this feeling ~~~ |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I saved this. I loved the structure of the poem, the rhyme and the story. It's a keeper. Alison |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
As you might guess, I love mystery and fantasy. Ida |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Great work here, Rex. Not only is it such an intriguing write but it flows like honey from line to line. A very enjoyable read... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Loved it Rex Like the others I find it flows beautifully and captures the reader so completely. Great work!! Once more indeed! Eric ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Everybody has said everything there is to be said in my opinion, I'm also keeping it. When early morning quietness seeps into my being it's like I'm being hugged by everything good in the world.—August 16, 2010 |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Okay, I am back because I really love this poem. A |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I came back too Alison, to save it. Great write and read Rex, and we were sure due for a "Rex Rhyme." Way overdue. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Oh, I was totally enthralled! Thank you! |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
thanks everyone ... i enjoyed writing this little ditty ... often thought about a possible sequel too  |
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Quiet One Junior Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 46Shhhhh |
Nice one to read aloud |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
mmm, mmmm, mmmm! I suppose if I had to pick my favorite verse, it would be this. But you've out done yourself and your entire poem is breathtaking and such a beautiful thing. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Hiking through a woodland glen as mellow shards of sunset bend to capture bright in waters clear reflections caught from mountains shear The silhouette sings twilight's best ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Legacy Member
since 2011-01-08
Posts 60Louisiana |
Déjà vu is something I wonder about, and this poem made me think about it, which is good. |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
This is my kind of poetry. Loved reading this. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!" |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
masterfully penned...a true gem! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You made me smile in a willing way... you rondeaued yourself beautifully... and circles, my friend, are always good things.  Thank you! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I got this feeling...very nice...James |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Nice work. Kept me going and going and going. Like someone else said, I like how you structure you poems. different and easy to read. Suicidal twin kills sister by mistake! |
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incwrite Member
since 2010-12-31
Posts 55new york |
each word just flowed perfectly to the next..loved it |
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