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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 2009-12-29 12:44 PM




The world is so silent
When memories are deep
The dawn wakens slow like a child from sleep

The rain has been falling
All night as I slept
The river is weeping the tears that I’ve wept

How long can the sky hold
The dark heavy rain
How long can a heart hold the dark heavy pain

It’s better if stars are
Concealed in the night
They’re only reflections of sun’s fiery light

It’s just an illusion
For wide dreamy eyes
They all disappear in bright morning skies

Tears are illusions
To innocent youth
They’re only reflections of life and of truth

And now in the end
memories silently creep
But there’s no regret and no tears left to weep

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LivingConfused
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1 posted 2009-12-30 01:57 AM


I like this.  A good thinking work.  my favorite line

How long can the sky hold
The dark heavy rain
How long can a heart hold the dark heavy pain

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2 posted 2009-12-30 09:08 AM


This is fantastic, Liz (as are most of your works). There is a wealth of feeling woven in these words, laced with a tinge of melancholy. It sets a definite mood...beautiful writing.
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3 posted 2009-12-30 01:59 PM


I'll say there is a lot of feeling woven in this.  Time to pack up my suitcase and head to Intercourse, PA to view the Clydesdales me thinks?  
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