a different take on a typical love poem- need help creating a title!!!

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Open Poetry #45

a different take on a typical love poem- need help creating a title!!!

Jaki H
Member

since 2008-01-19

Posts 232
NJ, USA

0 posted 2009-12-22 04:04 PM

hey this is my newest poem!!! hope you like! and if you think of a title that would be fabulous! k thanx.

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she was once my passion
my everything, my life
but love gave way to ration
cutting heart strings as a knife

and so love waits in heated strife
boiling deep within my soul
once joyous dreams of perfect life
now hatred takes control

and no one can suppress, console
o horror of the "sin"
we hear the deathbells as they toll
the phobic laugh, they win

they rise in gleeful rapture,
and laugh and danse and spin
they lay their righteous fire
o they raise their torches higher
o upon the funeral pyre-
watch their prey!

so upon the cross I lay
my love crying in the crowd
we both must pay today
for the arduous love we vowed

passion dripping, watch my shame
are we not all one and same?

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2009-12-23 06:09 PM

Kindof nice...how about "Love & Daggers"...James

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