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Father
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Confusion

0 posted 2009-12-19 09:10 PM



She falls away
To distance herself
From the long ago fields of her youth
She cannot see the thread that holds her
As it twines with the present and portents her tomorrow
For it belies its grasp on her sense of past and present

“I am not a little girl anymore” escapes from her lips
And by this statement, she sets a stone upon her past
Thinking “It is done” and as if in ceremony her lip trembles one last time
“The past will hurt me no more” she says walking away from its grave
And not looking back; she walks toward a future of her own devise

But;
She is still young
And cannot see that she will return
At first in anger for the innocence that was lost
And for loosing herself in its grasp
Then in bitterness and anguish for the hold it has
For it molds the shape of her heart to this day

But one day she will return here
And it will be for the last time
When age has given her the gift of perspective
And time has dulled the edge of fear and hatred
She will come
And with her; will come the peace of understanding
Wrapped in the heart of forgiveness
And on that day, the stone will be broken
And the shrine unmade
And she will fly free at last

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Klassy Lassy
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1 posted 2009-12-20 08:32 AM


Nodding.  This is like mirrors in my thought, but beautifully penned, and with such insight.  The years pass, and my white hair reminds me daily, that once I was white-blonde young and innocent, of times where I can not go again, except in my heart and mind.  The last lines, especially...

Poignantly strong penning!  ~Karen

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2 posted 2009-12-21 12:15 PM


I never thought I would understand a piece like this except I am older, and more than understand it.  Well done!

            
Happy Holidays
♥ Mysteria ♥

Margherita
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Eternity
3 posted 2009-12-22 09:29 AM


This is giving me goosebumps, for the content, but also for how wonderfully it is written.

Indeed, only forgiveness and acquired wisdom through time can bring freedom.

Welcome, dear Father!

Love,
Margherita

Father
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Confusion
4 posted 2009-12-24 12:23 PM


Thank you Dear Karen
Father
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5 posted 2009-12-24 12:24 PM


And thank you Myst, again you are too kind.
Father
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6 posted 2009-12-24 12:30 PM


Margherita;
It is the highest praise a writer can receive to know that a bridge has been laid between the words of my heart and the heart that reads them. You honor me greatly, many thanks.

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