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Alone With You

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Zeigeist
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0 posted 12-10-2009 01:31 PM       View Profile for Zeigeist   Email Zeigeist   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Zeigeist


Alone With You

My eyes close
When it begins.
This old black and white film,
This worn cornered shoe box
Of memories.

My lips move in the dark,
To some old song.
My shoes move in
One more slow dance
With you

This squeaky chair
Holds me like a mother.

It floods
And fills
The void
While I

Remember.
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ThisDiamond
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1 posted 12-10-2009 02:34 PM       View Profile for ThisDiamond   Email ThisDiamond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ThisDiamond's Home Page   View IP for ThisDiamond

Very touching write.  Our memories run deeper than time.  Liked this
JamesMichael
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2 posted 12-10-2009 05:52 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Enjoyed...James
therightside
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3 posted 12-11-2009 12:51 PM       View Profile for therightside   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for therightside

I very much enjoyed this! Truly touching... I think just about anyone can read this and instantly connect with it, thry're own 'someone' pops into their head, and the words become their own. It takes a great talent to be able to put into words what most of us are thinking. Nicely done.
Zeigeist
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4 posted 12-11-2009 05:38 PM       View Profile for Zeigeist   Email Zeigeist   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Zeigeist

Thank you ThisDiamond, I am glad you like it.

Z.
Zeigeist
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5 posted 12-11-2009 05:39 PM       View Profile for Zeigeist   Email Zeigeist   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Zeigeist

thanks James. for your reply

Z.
Zeigeist
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6 posted 12-11-2009 05:44 PM       View Profile for Zeigeist   Email Zeigeist   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Zeigeist

Thank you for your kind praise rightside.

Z.
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7 posted 12-11-2009 10:37 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

First of all, welcome to Passions, and I hope you will enjoy it here as much as some of long time members do.

I sure identified with your delightful first post.  There is nothing like sitting with a bunch of memories in a box that is for sure.

            
Happy Holidays
♥ Mysteria ♥

The Lady
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poignant and very well done


Zeigeist
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9 posted 12-12-2009 02:03 PM       View Profile for Zeigeist   Email Zeigeist   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Zeigeist

Mysteria, thank you for the welcome, and I am glad you identified with my poem. It is no secret that that is what most poets strive for.

Z.
Zeigeist
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10 posted 12-12-2009 02:04 PM       View Profile for Zeigeist   Email Zeigeist   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Zeigeist

Thank you Lady, very nice to hear this morning

Z.
Laverne Pacquire
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11 posted 12-16-2009 08:06 PM       View Profile for Laverne Pacquire   Email Laverne Pacquire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Laverne Pacquire

I like this poem..
I like the form..
The content isn't so bad.

I especially like the title.


please check out me blog of poetry:  poetryandwatertogo.blogspot.com

Sunshine
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12 posted 12-16-2009 11:19 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Welcome, welcome to Passions!

Please check your email
for a Very Special Welcome!

I look forward to hearing more
of your voice in the near future!



viking_metal
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13 posted 12-17-2009 02:51 AM       View Profile for viking_metal   Email viking_metal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for viking_metal

That happens lots.

To all of us, I think.


At least to me.
Here's to remembering,


Paul

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Marchmadness
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14 posted 12-17-2009 04:28 AM       View Profile for Marchmadness   Email Marchmadness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marchmadness

Lovely poem, Z.
           Ida
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15 posted 12-17-2009 04:27 PM       View Profile for Earth Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Earth Angel's Home Page   View IP for Earth Angel

I put myself in that Rockwellian setting and I was flooded with my own nostalgic thoughts.

A lovely, reflective moment! Thank you!

Giving you a warm, welcoming pip hug,

Earth Angel


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Margherita
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16 posted 12-17-2009 04:47 PM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

Nice rendering of these serene moments of remembering.

Welcome to Pip, Zeitgeist.

Love,
Margherita
Zeigeist
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17 posted 12-18-2009 05:45 PM       View Profile for Zeigeist   Email Zeigeist   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Zeigeist

Thank you all for your warm welcomes and hugs. I am overcome by the warmth of the people here at this site.

Zeitgeist
Klassy Lassy
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I have boxes of old photos that I keep thinking I will organize for posterity.  Every time I get close to them, I experience the flooding, too.   This is a beautifully emotive write, and someday, I hope someone will remember me, with an old love song on their lips and a dance held in his heart.

Karen
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19 posted 01-02-2010 07:42 PM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

This poem is poignant and very beautiful.

Welcome to PiP and happy new year.
Alison
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