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The Lady
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0 posted 2009-12-07 11:17 PM


contrails mark the spot  
where last I saw your tired and lonely face  
pain lodged in singular cells    
cried out broad and wide  
don’t you see what I do to myself  
how I take myself away    
can’t you see I want you to stop me    

your smile was always small tentative  
joy never tipped your soul  

god how we tried

your hands grasped at life
spending a perfect moment of itself
my hands tried to hold you
show you
what was only a short distance away

you kept your eyes on the sky  

I knew you were really looking
for a stumpy mountain peak  
that could hide you
a piece of clear sky
a place
to leave

contrails

[This message has been edited by The Lady (12-08-2009 11:57 AM).]

© Copyright 2009 Kate - All Rights Reserved
Alison
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1 posted 2009-12-08 12:15 PM


Kate,

I have been missing you.  I saw the title of your poem and immediately thought of today's sky.  I love your poetry - always have, always will!

A

Margherita
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2 posted 2009-12-08 05:10 AM


... this tugs at my heartstrings, dear Kate. So poignant and exquisitely crafted.

Oh yes, how good it is to see you here again!

Thank you!

Love,
Margherita

latearrival
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3 posted 2009-12-08 09:33 PM


I have been wondering about you. So good to see you posting again. latearrival
BluesSerenade
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4 posted 2009-12-08 09:48 PM


Oh oh, you have been so missed.  What a special gift you have given us...
it's quite wonderful to find your poem here tonight.

Wonderful way you have~

I always enjoyed reading you, lovely Lady~

LindsayP
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Australia, Victoria
5 posted 2009-12-09 07:56 PM



A fine write Kate, much enjoyed.

Lindsay

The Lady
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6 posted 2009-12-10 12:56 PM


Thank you Alison. It’s good to be back with friends. I enjoy your work too!


Margherita, your work always touches me. Thank you for your kind reply.
Love, Kate



I appreciate your reply latearrival. It's good to post again.


Thank you so much Lori. I have missed being here.
  


Thank you Lindsay.

Nancy Hardin
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7 posted 2009-12-10 11:48 AM


I am new to Pip, so this is the first of yours I have read, but I am impressed with this one. Such a feeling of loss and regret while reading "Contrails." Glad you came back, and hope you never leave.
ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
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Michigan, USA
8 posted 2009-12-10 01:07 PM


The winter seems pronounced in your finely crafted words here.  Deep drifts of feeling.
Glad to read you again, and hope you are lifted by placing these words in our keep here.

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
9 posted 2009-12-10 01:47 PM


your words are a warm welcome
on a winters day
a long drink
when thirst has over taken you
and a welcomed
conversation
like no time has passed

I have missed you

JamesMichael
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10 posted 2009-12-10 06:03 PM


Nice writing...reminds me of a woman I called once who proceeded to tell me she was getting married...I wished her luck...two months later she filed for divorce...she told me later she had called me hoping I would talk her out of it...James
Magnus
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11 posted 2009-12-10 07:29 PM


Simply amazing,  what we do when we don't
think we are capable...leaving our own
contrails...

Nice to see you with us again....

therightside
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since 2009-12-09
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USA
12 posted 2009-12-11 12:55 PM


this is really wonderful, great flow and very insightful. it seems to speak of loving someone who could not love themself, even when you tried to show them how. touching.
The Lady
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13 posted 2009-12-11 11:14 PM




Thank you Nancy. I look forward to reading your work.

I am lifted TD and I feel at home… thank you

Thank you Helen. You inspire me and I have missed you.

Poignant story James. Thank you for sharing it.

Barry, it’s so nice to be here again. Your work is amazing as always.  

Thank you therightside… you read me well.

miscellanea
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14 posted 2009-12-18 05:54 PM



The Lady,

    I really like your writing!  So many things flash before me when I read it.  Loved the entire poem, but this line in particular,


"joy never tipped your soul"  

Much enjoyed!

     miscellanea



Goldenrose
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15 posted 2009-12-18 06:02 PM


Personal and heartfelt enjoyed this..

Thank you..

Goldenrose.

Being deeply loved by someone gives you strength,while loving someone deeply gives you courage. Lao Tzu 6th century BC.

The Lady
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The Southwest
16 posted 2009-12-19 11:12 PM





Thank you so much “misce”

Goldenrose, I appreciate your reply.

ctowen
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Green Mountains of VT
17 posted 2009-12-25 03:48 PM


Absolutely opening to the eyes and the senses, words like these have certainly been missed.

   CT

The Lady
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The Southwest
18 posted 2009-12-29 01:07 AM




thank you so very much CT

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