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Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

0 posted 2009-11-28 12:59 PM

I guess I just keep coming back
to how you hurt my feelings
Maybe it shouldn’t matter
And maybe I should rise above
The words that you wrote
But I can’t

Right now when it is dark
And I want to write there’s a block
And an echo of you clawing
At a private part of me
That I shared with you
Until I bled

And I want to rise above the anger
And I want to not give you power
But right now, it still hurts
That you betrayed my trust
In a way that few can
And I hurt.

-

Alison

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

1 posted 2009-11-28 01:12 AM

Powerful sharazz, alaboo.

I think I've been there, and that sucks big time. A lot.

I'm glad you posted this. I liked it lots. It's neat to read the side of you that isn't about nature.

I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple, really.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

2 posted 2009-11-28 01:15 AM

Thank you, Paul friend. Sometimes the way to cut out the pain is to write it away.

I saw you here and figured you'd have a hug and you did.

A

MorningStar
Member

since 2009-10-26

Posts 290
Pittsburgh, Pa

3 posted 2009-11-28 11:43 AM

This is all to real. At the risk of sounding corney - this one speaks to me. In fact I think it was me... Well said.

Aenea

If I don't say it...who will?

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2009-11-28 12:00 PM

You know Alison you write the hurt with such real emotion, there is no glossing it over, no flutter or frills...
it is impossible not to feel the pain and sorrow. For me regrets are the worst of it, and I think when our hearts break
regrets do indeed come into play. You are a gifted poet and your words touch deeply.

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

5 posted 2009-11-28 07:30 PM

i hope this is not about you

yet i feel as if you have broken into my heart and written about me

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

6 posted 2009-11-28 07:59 PM

Aenea,

Thank you.  Maybe it is about many of us - hurt is a universal emotion.  Thank you for reading and letting me know that this poem touched you.

Alison

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BluesSerenade,

Thank you - I guess I can't frill some things.  I am not much of a frilly person anyway, but I do know what you mean.

Thank you again,

Alison

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Helen,

Yes, it's about me.  This is a sister thing and it hurts like hell.  Thank you for reading and caring.

Alison

LindsayP
Member Elite

since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

7 posted 2009-11-28 08:13 PM

My dear Alison, I really feel for you my dear and I wish I could say something to ease the pain, but hurt does fade with time
so hang in there for I'm sure all your friends will be pulling for you. Good luck,
God bless and take care. love.

Lindsay

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

8 posted 2009-11-28 10:13 PM

Alison - ouch, this writing hurts. A different write from you than you usually do. Wish you well...

BC

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

9 posted 2009-11-28 10:42 PM

So sorry to hear that you are hurting, Alison. Your words do touch us all.
Hugs, Ida

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

10 posted 2009-11-29 12:43 PM

Lindsay,

Thank you for your caring and kindness.  Yes, it fades - it just takes time.  I am willing to give it time and will write the hurt away.  Thank you, my friend.

Love,
Alison

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Bill,

Thank you for reading.  I hope that I never write the same way.  I try not to fall into one way of writing poetry and to try not to just write about one subject.  I guess I see poetry as a menu of choices - and I write to the style that fits the thoughts in my head.  Some might say now I have to learn how to expand my abilities.  I dunno.

Thank you.

Alison

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Ida,

Thank for the hugs and for just being you.  I really appreciate you.

xoxoxo
Alison

Klassy Lassy
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since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

11 posted 2009-11-29 01:29 AM

It is really harder to write when pain is present... and just dealing with it takes so much focus and energy. I'm sorry for the callous wounds.

Karen

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

12 posted 2009-11-29 04:15 AM

Hello Alison, thanks for the touching confession, writing about can help to forget and heal, I am sure you will have different experiences , all are not bad...Thanks for the sensitive poem.

yann

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

13 posted 2009-11-29 09:26 PM

Oh how I know those run-on sentences
of the heart, mind, soul. Nothing could
have been done with commas, exclamation points, or even words bold with red color.

Yet, you rant well.

Although I am terribly sorry for the hurt
you must be or were in.

Getting it "out" is what it's all about.

You did well.

I'm still proud of my girl.

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

14 posted 2009-11-30 09:23 AM

quote:
And I want to rise above the anger
And I want to not give you power
But right now, it still hurts

((((Alison)))) Oh, yes, some things hurt even if we try to wear our shield of love and forgiveness.

You said this so powerfully. And I am sorry for you and for all ... too many ... who sooner or later find themselves in such a situation.

But I have also witnessed reuniting, even after years, long after the stormy waters have calmed down.

Love and hugs.
Margherita

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

15 posted 2009-11-30 10:15 AM

Karen,

Thank you.  It is.

Alison

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yann,

Thank you, yann.  Yes, there is much good in my life.  I am just kind of choking on some ugliness right now.

xoxoox
Alison

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Sunshine,

I read this and had to walk away for a bit.  You choked me up.  Thank you - and you are right.  Rants help until they simply are no longer necessary.  I think I am about ready to knuckly down and write some "doggerel" again.

xoxoxo
Alison

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Margherita,

Thank you - yes, it's sad and it hurts.  And, yes, in time, we will talk again.  However, the relationship we had will change - they always do after something like this.  I loved the one we had.  In some ways, I am mourning a death.

Love you,
Alison

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

16 posted 2009-12-01 03:33 AM

My dear Ali-girl.. I'm sorry I haven't been around for you of late.. you are often in my thoughts and when i read your poem I just wanted to reach out and give you a big warm hug...

Bisous de Sydney
RDB x

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

GBride
Senior Member

since 2009-07-02

Posts 538

17 posted 2009-12-01 06:49 AM

Dear Alison,
What a lovely poem.
It expresses the pain all of us go through some time in our lives. Indeed, probably many times.
The Dalai Lama starts each speech with, "We are all the same."I believe he is right.
Although I am Baptist and he is Buddist, he and I are the same in all the important ways: we all know joy, and we all know pain.
Thank you or this lovely write, and this important insite into your life.
The phisical life we have is nothing compaired to the spirit that lives inside us. I hope you are feeling that joy again soon!

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

18 posted 2009-12-01 09:19 AM

I tell myself that if someone is able to hurt me that I am thankful because at this point the easy thing to do would be to feel nothing.

<3

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Soul snatcher
Junior Member

since 2009-11-24

Posts 29

19 posted 2009-12-01 01:10 PM

Dear Alison.....your hurt is evidence of your love....the heart will heal and the pain will easy.....and you will continue to love....for it is love that will raise you up.....

Love
Ss

Chalmette Guy
Senior Member

since 2009-03-11

Posts 1257
Louisiana

20 posted 2009-12-02 08:53 AM

Wow, you capture the feeling well.
Who here won't read this and say, "been there, done that" ?

I'm sorry for the hurt that inspired this.

This is a kinda different writing style for you huh Ali.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

21 posted 2009-12-03 03:32 PM

And I want to rise above the anger
And I want to not give you power
But right now, it still hurts

You do what you can when you can... and right now, you deal with the wounds and try not to pick at the scabs. And you write words that reach so many people and they recognize their pain in yours and perhaps feel less alone and even somewhat better. And if such touching words deserve the term, well, I'll be praying the world is blessed with more gifted doggerel writers. *S*

latearrival
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since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

22 posted 2009-12-04 01:01 AM

Understanding this Alison. I had two brothers. One has died. Over the years one or the other has been able to say the thing that stung, but I learned to let it go. I always wanted a sister, but somehow I know a sister can inflict even deeper wounds. Sharing the hurt.love to you,latearrival

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

23 posted 2009-12-07 04:35 PM

ahhhh Alison
I know this sister pain and I hope it is soon resolved for you

the poem speaks profoundly

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

24 posted 2009-12-07 07:42 PM

to you friend

rise above! I know you will.

naturegirl
Member

since 2009-09-30

Posts 168
England

25 posted 2009-12-07 08:00 PM

it's always the people we keep closest to our hearts that have the power to hurt us the most, perhaps because we let down our defences.hope that your hurt is resolved soon.

least said soonest mended?

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

26 posted 2009-12-08 12:30 PM

RDB

I know you are just a shout away.  Thank you for caring as you do.  I love you.

A-girl

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GB,

What a beautiful and healing thought you have shared with me.  Thank you.

xoxoxo
A

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Susan,

Yes, there's a fine line and a vast area where we simply no longer care or feel.  When that happens, I mourn it like death because a relationship has ended.  Truly ended.

Thank you.
Alison

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Ss,

Yes, and thank you.  However, sometimes we can't retrieve once we shared.  It changes, but the innocence is forever lost.

Alison

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CG,

Thank you for sharing your thoughts.  I don't think it is all that different from many things I have shared in the past - but, I guess when we grow our writing deepens.

A

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Ruth,

Thank you for the beautiful letters.  I owe you one, my friend.  Your support meant, and means, the world to me.

Love,
Alison

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Kate,

Thank you.  As I said in another post, I have missed you.  Time will resolve it  -  I think a lot of time though.

A

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Dixie,

Thank you, darlin'.

xoxoxo
Alison

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ng,

Truer words have not been spoken. We have been close all of my life.  Who knows if we can retrieve that.

A

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