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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2009-11-20 01:53 AM


The tune of love played hauntingly
for many a day undisturbed
until the seriousness of a rebuff
made of the ears non-working organs.

But everyone knows the ears aren’t soul
and soul still listens and sings along
like an uncontrollable wilful child
while the parent wails and bemoans
its complete and utter inability
to produce what the world expects.
  
The parent in time knows to let go
and let the soul listen, sing, dance,
for surely it is the right of soul
to make of its life what it likes.

But when parent and soul split up
there’s an emptiness in the “gut”
that like a virus crashes the system
and prevents a needful restart.

The system is dead that once played love
and held body and soul together
because when a rebuff hits home
there’s nothing left to speak of.

And so for a time, the longest time,
the unspeakable silence of soul’s depart
reverberates down the lines of time
because nothing ever can rectify
the dire and seriousness consequences
of an all-embracing rebuff!

Helen / 20 November 2009


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nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
1 posted 2009-11-20 06:58 AM


The system is dead that once played love
and held body and soul together
because when a rebuff hits home
there’s nothing left to speak of.

And so for a time, the longest time,
the unspeakable silence of soul’s depart
reverberates down the lines of time
because nothing ever can rectify
the dire and seriousness consequences
of an all-embracing rebuff!
this is so true Helen... you write so well of life's journeys


M

AncientHippie
Member
since 2009-10-15
Posts 411
Surfing the Cosmic Flow
2 posted 2009-11-20 11:00 AM


Dear Helen:
You have turned our internal coping mechanisms into the subject of a wonderful, although sad, work of art.  Brilliant and provoking imagery lends a profound, and personal, credibility to this perfect piece.
Go well
Jim

"We are stardust:  we are golden:  and we've got to get ourselves back to the garden."  --Joni Mitchell "Woodstock"

Midnitesun
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Gaia
3 posted 2009-11-20 11:24 AM


Poignant write, Helen. Once spoken, the verbal rebuff cannot be taken back. Hopefully, time will heal whatever caused the heart-rift.
Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
4 posted 2009-11-20 01:51 PM


Thank you, M.  Yes, all of life is a journey but sometimes I just want to stand still and, I suppose, I recently got what I wanted.  Now I'm restless!

Jim - Thank you so much for taking the time to leave such a great comment.  Certainly much appreciated.

Kacy - Thanks.  I guess non-verbal rebuffs are the worst and yes, time can heal.  Sometimes it chooses not to though - it's that damn free will.  

Helen  

Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
5 posted 2009-11-20 05:59 PM


Those rebuffs aren't easy to handle, no. Your work is your heart's research for peace.

Very impressive depth of thoughts.

We need to learn to focus on our soul's whispers ... they say "you are loved, you are loved, you are loved ...".


Margherita

LindsayP
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since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria
6 posted 2009-11-20 07:55 PM


  

The parent in time knows to let go
and let the soul listen, sing, dance,
for surely it is the right of soul
to make of its life what it likes.

But when parent and soul split up
there’s an emptiness in the “gut”
that like a virus crashes the system
and prevents a needful restart.

A very poignant thought provoking post dear
Helen. I would say written from the heart.

You have put a great deal of thought in writing this one my dear. Love and a big hug

Lindsay



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