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Eirian
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since 2009-04-13
Posts 70


0 posted 2009-11-16 12:34 PM



Your lips move, as your lies
Fall like rain on my parched tongue,
I swallow and lay back as
Each word is practically sung.

Your eyes are locked onto me
Yet I can’t see your soul
I fidget with the hem of my skirt
As I fight to keep control.

The void inside has reopened
The wound is ripped and raw
My eyes are constantly darting
Between you and the bedroom door

Part of me believes you
And drinks your words like wine
The other part is shattered,
It was you who committed this crime

I grip your hands too tightly
The only thing that betrays my pain
My heart is leaping in my chest
As my cheeks, they burn with shame

Indecision has me now
Do I stay or do I go?
And if it happens all over again
Would I even know?

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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
1 posted 2009-11-16 06:42 AM


"I grip your hands too tightly
The only thing that betrays my pain"

I felt your words~~


M

AncientHippie
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since 2009-10-15
Posts 411
Surfing the Cosmic Flow
2 posted 2009-11-16 10:02 AM


Very stark work here, Eirian.  I feel the incipient tragedy in this piece, but realise the relentless inevitability of what is happening.  Heavy art.
Namaste, and
Peace
Jim

"We are stardust:  we are golden:  and we've got to get ourselves back to the garden."  --Joni Mitchell "Woodstock"

shalisadefa
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since 2009-08-13
Posts 114

3 posted 2009-11-16 01:36 PM



Looks like you and I are in the same realm at this point in life.

'strumming' my pain with your words



LindsayP
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since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria
4 posted 2009-11-17 08:22 PM



That does sound rather traumatic dear Eirian
but put it down to experience and gain from

it. you will be wiser next time. I wish you luck. Take care and a big hug.

Lindsay

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