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shalisadefa
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since 2009-08-13
Posts 114


0 posted 2009-11-15 08:24 AM



I loved it when you smiled
really smiled
the corners of your mouth
curled up
made me see
the man
you really are

I treasured it
when you teased
‘just like his daddy’
and you looked at me
daring me to react
twinkles
in your eyes

‘I love you’
this could be us again
I want to be back
back in your embrace
back in your heart
back in your soul

make me yours again



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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2009-11-15 08:42 AM


Remembering precious moments brings the deep longing to the surface. This is most beautiful and the yearning is rendered with elegance yet with great intensity.

Love,
Margherita

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
2 posted 2009-11-15 09:25 AM


I have experienced similar longings (thankfully they have long since past) and you expressed those emotions with grace and eloquence.

The yeanrning has now passed but like you, the wqrm memories remain.

May love fill up your life with Light.


EA

Eirian
Member
since 2009-04-13
Posts 70

3 posted 2009-11-15 09:27 AM


I can relate.

Nice work.

shalisadefa
Member
since 2009-08-13
Posts 114

4 posted 2009-11-15 10:44 AM


Dear Margherita: Thanks for posting again such a nice reply, your comments I especially appreciate, since I am big fan of your style.

To EarthAngel and Eirian: The environment on PiP is so enspiring to me, thanks to the both of you.

Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182
Netherlands
5 posted 2009-11-16 07:31 PM


First of all: a lovely poem you've written here.

As to your question why I post on an English speaking site: send me an email and I'll tell you all about it (just click the envelop in my post). Too long to put it here and you don't have an emailaddress showing.


Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

Klassy Lassy
Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187
Oregon
6 posted 2009-11-16 08:58 PM


Ohhh, the eyes have it.  Your poem leaves me smiling and dreaming of blue eyes that twinkle and shine with laughterb and warmth.  I truly enjoyed this.  

KL

Bill Charles
Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
7 posted 2009-11-19 03:00 PM


shalisadefa - precious moments are just that, precious, however at times they are fleeing...

BC

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