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oh_ok
Junior Member
since 2009-07-20
Posts 17


0 posted 2009-11-02 06:14 PM


[Neocrusade]
Hypothetically spotted
By a hypothetical enemy
While hypothetical corpses eat a hearty noon-time meal
And so it goes.
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[Plight]
Fun soon ends in a tragic sight
Clutching his throbbing ankle tight
Hindsight wishes, so
That his favorite super hero
Had not been one with the power of flight

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SlowlyFallAway
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since 2008-08-29
Posts 279
North Carolina
1 posted 2009-11-03 10:54 AM


We can't all be like our superheros. Loved that last part.
AncientHippie
Member
since 2009-10-15
Posts 411
Surfing the Cosmic Flow
2 posted 2009-11-03 06:28 PM


oh_ok, I like the work in this couplet.  It would appear to be two parts of an ongoing work:  I certainly hope so, as I would love to see more of this bright, crisp style and 1337 content/context.  Way cool.
Jim

"We are stardust:  we are golden:  and we've got to get ourselves back to the garden."  --Joni Mitchell "Woodstock"

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
3 posted 2009-11-04 10:00 AM


Way cool!
Good to read you again.

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945
Texas, USA
4 posted 2009-11-04 10:22 AM


Especially loved the second one-it made me chuckle.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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