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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2009-10-28 07:26 AM


I can almost feel your fingers in my hair sometimes
when you whisper that way and hold your breath
and then talk fast about other things
like you had eyes tattooed on your skin

and they were watching you get warmer in the room
but you say you like how it feels to dance
with nothing on but the residue of love
and you don't ever want to have enough of it

you then became so suddenly quiet but I didn't mind
that I might have woke you from your contentment
and that there was something insatiable there now
that seemed to be devouring you more each day

I guess I knew it would get me too if I were there
but I would not mind being that close to you
if I knew we would not be able to break away again
from that almost feeling of fingers in our hair

when we whispered that way and held our breath together


______________


daark (do of water)


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2009-10-28 08:16 AM


Quiet quests are never questionable,
just good.




Lori Grosser Rhoden
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2 posted 2009-10-28 10:44 AM


D- What woman in her right mind wouldn't want to be the object of your innuendoed attentions?!   Enticing intrigue~L

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3 posted 2009-10-28 12:32 PM


Loved this one!  Hey D, maybe a duet with our new member, Lori Grosser Rhoden?  I can sure see that one being a wonderful duet.
Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2009-10-28 12:57 PM


ms sun, thank you my delightful friend..

___________

ms lg..if you tempt me I will blush..(I do remember how..) thanks lady

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ms myst, do it with ms LG? huh? um.. geeze..oh..duet,..sorry, didn't have my broke bottles on when I read it..thank you for the smooth smile ms

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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5 posted 2009-10-28 01:28 PM


D- I think you meant coke bottles.......and what is a duet and how do you duet, I mean do it?  If you do blush (Yeah right), you must write red faced (puhleeez)~L
Margherita
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6 posted 2009-10-28 05:43 PM


When both hold their breath together, magic occurs.

And this is once again a breathtaking piece of sensuous poetry, dear D.!

Love,
Margherita

BluesSerenade
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7 posted 2009-10-28 08:07 PM


Just going to flutter my lashes and let them fall quietly,
while I savor the moments.  

Special stuff, DS~


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8 posted 2009-10-29 03:25 AM


When I read this, I felt as if I had slipped under the water in my bathtub and was listening to the sensuous silence.

Yep, like this here bathtub poem.

A

Dark Stranger
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9 posted 2009-10-29 06:48 AM


ms mar, thanks lady friend

___________

ms bluezy, thanks babe for the eyes


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ms ali-san, I do like where you take me when you read...thanks little one

AncientHippie
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10 posted 2009-10-29 08:57 AM


DS, your dark eroticism continues unabated!  Another perfect piece:  dark, burnished, strong and sensual.
Peace
Jim

"We are stardust:  we are golden:  and we've got to get ourselves back to the garden."  --Joni Mitchell "Woodstock"

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11 posted 2009-10-29 09:19 AM


but I would not mind being that close to you
if I knew we would not be able to break away again
from that almost feeling of fingers in our hair

when we whispered that way and held our breath together

I
absolutely
totally
completely
LOVE this!!

Now if I can just remember how to breathe!!

Dark Stranger
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12 posted 2009-10-29 12:54 PM


AH..humble thanks amigo

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ms suthern..you make me smile with your whispers

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