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Open Poetry #45

kiss of a fool

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2009-10-18 04:10 PM

A lover laughed so high
I could feel her soft breaths
soft, so the curtains waved,
and a kiss ensued
where lips were met
but only before we could regret
that she was another lover
another season that didn't
match my fur coat
or my skins fallen rope

she wouldn't grasp any further
so I let go
and the night carried something of a sword
writhing me of my hopes
and a farewell from her
as her stilettos left the front door.

AncientHippie
Member

since 2009-10-15

Posts 411
Surfing the Cosmic Flow

1 posted 2009-10-19 08:29 AM

Well, Tomer. My first thought was that I should feel sadness for the breakup of this encounter. That initial feeling changed when I realised the inevitability of the parting. I thought the use of the phrase "another season that didn't match my fur coat" was excellent, and the phrase, "sword writhing me of my hopes" was memorable. A good read.

Sutra 4: Do not expect your Path to be smooth. It will have rocks, slippery portions, and parts that are washed away completely. Persevere.

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

2 posted 2009-10-19 01:49 PM

Thanks, Ancient....appreciate the feedback.

Cheers

Tomer

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