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Werd Na Rumboe
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since 2009-10-13
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0 posted 2009-10-13 01:53 PM






it's quite literal how considerate the raindrops matter;
from left to right, they slide; like an abacus reads
or spattering against open windows, the marshy rug..
below, to make us laugh; its hairs engorged
outside, a cloud just explodes, boom boom soft

and sold me here was too instead; dressed in sound
blings and wivs alike, so kind; the vip of corduroy
you pardon without, motion; you helium eyes
yet we're grateful that you threw up brows/coins/pins
skylines in the ice cream melt to say - are we not songs?

but it's quite strange, my flowers in the rain.. will bend
each season, from grammar to advanced mathematics
their hands in question, in time will pine, for what's gone
stray; like have nots plucked, or have dos flang
the rain in the clouds that low down lays…is still just fog

still some things remain unchanged; like hail so cold it sings



© Copyright 2009 Werd Na Rumboe - All Rights Reserved
Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
1 posted 2009-10-13 02:25 PM


Werd words...very cool introduction and a pleasure to view how you blend them into something warm and chilled at the same time...welcome to the pipzoo
Werd Na Rumboe
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since 2009-10-13
Posts 21

2 posted 2009-10-13 02:40 PM


Thank you. I've been looking for a place like this. Hello back and around.
Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
3 posted 2009-10-13 03:54 PM


...and this place is always looking for writers like you. Welcome...
Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
4 posted 2009-10-13 07:35 PM


Welcome! I'm new too. It's like poetry home away from home here.
I liked the slick twist on your words. More.~L

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
5 posted 2009-10-15 06:59 PM


Werd na Rumboe (Andrew?)I really loved this especially your celebration of wordplay and words and concepts, and the poem's conversational tone - intimate, yet enigmatic, making the reader a partly willing, yet partly unwilling voyeur - I kept getting the feeling of the ambiance of a certain poet, but in a dream-like way, I can't quite grasp who - and I really want to remember who - I just know that I love his/her work - perhaps I am thinking of a blend of more than one poet - possibly a touch of Emily Dickinson and a large dollop of William Carlos Williams - but there is another, I think, as well . . . Ah, I've got it!  It's Werd na Rumboe!

Owl

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
6 posted 2009-10-15 08:37 PM


smiling at the enjoyment I got from reading this several times over~~

M

AncientHippie
Member
since 2009-10-15
Posts 411
Surfing the Cosmic Flow
7 posted 2009-10-16 10:47 AM


Okay, so I'm not saying I understand it:  I'm just saying that I enjoyed this piece very much.  Some of the words, and the grammatical liberties made me go, "Wha?" but overall the skill of the work makes me look forward to more from your (virtual) pen.

Sutra 93: Do not speak to me of Reality: it is a personal concept that varies with the Observer.
--Jim's Guide to Enlightenment:  The Complete Sutras

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