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Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2009-10-12 03:10 PM

Starting Over

Looking inside out
At what I want
From me
Trying to follow
The flow of emotion
Into reason
With remembering
Feeling homesick
For places
That never really existed
Getting used to
What I’m unaccustomed to
Bit by bits and pieces
The kaleidoscope
Crashes images
Into mosaic
Pain stained glass windows
Thrown open
My heart reaches out
To touch the rain
And grow roots
In virgin ground

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

1 posted 2009-10-12 07:40 PM

I had to do some starting over last year... and it's tough. Good luck establishing new roots! *S*

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2009-10-12 08:53 PM

Lori,

Only because I know your voice personally,
can I read this the way I would hear it.

Your voice is unique in sound; we'll work
on getting you to voice over your poetry.

I know of a few folk here who know the tricks
of that specific trade...we'll talk to them.

Good job!

Namyh
Senior Member

since 2009-01-20

Posts 988

3 posted 2009-10-12 08:57 PM

Lori - The opportunity for growth usually doesn't come as a torrential downpour. It more often comes one drop at a time. It's the fearless willingness to reach for those drops that makes roots grow and your work here a part of us all. Much enjoyed. Namyh

brneyedgrly
Senior Member

since 2009-06-08

Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere

4 posted 2009-10-12 10:14 PM

With remembering
Feeling homesick
For places
That never really existed
Getting used to
What I’m unaccustomed to
Bit by bits and pieces
The kaleidoscope
Crashes images
Into mosaic
Pain stained glass windows
Thrown open
My heart reaches out
To touch the rain
And grow roots
In virgin ground
___________

fantastic writing

welcome

Chalmette Guy
Senior Member

since 2009-03-11

Posts 1257
Louisiana

5 posted 2009-10-13 09:24 AM

This speaks to me.

Wonderful stuff. And I look forward to seeing more from you.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

6 posted 2009-10-13 10:34 AM

Chalmette Guy-Feels great to be heard, Thanks! Now that my friends have drug me out of the Poet’s closet you will be hearing more from me…..so I have been informed.

Namyh-Monsoons and floods happen too, all is a part of growth. Sometimes out of deepest turmoil I find unexpected blessing of joy. To continue to reach out with love lies the heart of my Faith.

Brneyedgrly-Fantastic writing?! Well, I am honored and feel very warmly welcomed, thank you so much.

Southern -Glad to hear from you again, glad you could relate. Thanks

Sunshine- It clearly states "be kind" it does not say scare me to death with things I know nothing about. Voice over? Sounds like a Ventriloquist's act and I get stage fright. Okay, friend as long as I'm out of the closet......... I am your humble student.

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

7 posted 2009-10-13 12:40 PM

ms LG..poetry like this and "out of the closet too?" insert "damn" here and a grin..enjoyed it ms

dragngrl28
Junior Member

since 2009-10-12

Posts 45
Texas, USA

8 posted 2009-10-13 04:01 PM

I did enjoy the poem and I can relate to many of the concepts. I would have found the poem easier to read if it had been grouped a little differently (like if the third line was added onto the 2nd).

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

9 posted 2009-10-13 04:34 PM

dragngrl28
hey-good eye, problem is I do that alot. I'm still debating if it is chronic problem
or just the sound of my voice. I'll throw a little Sunshine on it and see what grows up. Thanks for taking the time and interest in my work.

dragngrl28
Junior Member

since 2009-10-12

Posts 45
Texas, USA

10 posted 2009-10-13 04:46 PM

I do the same thing. I have a certain pattern in my head and when I read the poem that is what appears and it is difficult for me to recreate that pattern so that others read it the same way I imagine it. Does that make any sense? I'm still re-working poems that are several years old.

hafrock
Junior Member

since 2009-10-10

Posts 34
India

11 posted 2009-10-13 05:22 PM

Reminds me of times i'v started over..you've punched in what i'd have felt..great writing..hope to see more from you..and yeah all the best on your new roots..

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

12 posted 2009-10-13 05:34 PM

hey hafrock, thanks. My new roots have taken off and love is in full bloom. My little bud looks like she is beginning to blossom here too. Love heals with time.

unboundpoetess
Member

since 2008-05-24

Posts 477

13 posted 2009-10-14 07:36 PM

Here's to roots and lovely writing...

Nice to see you, and I'm looking forward to more of your voice.
Heather

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

14 posted 2009-10-14 08:12 PM

Thanks again Heather, I'll be posting my Epitaph in insights soon.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

15 posted 2009-10-15 07:01 AM

Lori, I sometimes feel that each day is a new start to my life~~

You expressed it well.

Maureen

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

16 posted 2009-10-15 08:25 AM

M-thanks for the read.~L

Mr Naz
Junior Member

since 2009-10-22

Posts 29
London United Kingdom

17 posted 2009-10-25 04:56 AM

good work, - coincidentally today I start a new life on my own !!!

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

18 posted 2009-10-25 10:55 AM

Mr Naz
I hope your new path brings you new growth and many blessings~L

shalisadefa
Member

since 2009-08-13

Posts 114

19 posted 2009-10-26 04:50 PM

very nice

you know what strikes me most..
it's the part about feeling homesick for places that never really existed.

painful but true.

AncientHippie
Member

since 2009-10-15

Posts 411
Surfing the Cosmic Flow

20 posted 2009-10-26 06:17 PM

Nicely done, Lori. You speak of a place that I inhabited 26 years ago. You weave a complex wordspell that continues to captivate me.
Jim Morrison once said, "It ain't the destination, man, it's the trip." We must appreciate each aspect of the past as each bit contributes to whom we are today.
Namaste
Jim

Sutra 25: Remember that a pile of ordure is simply that: Seek not to give it meaning.
Jim's Guide to Enlightenment: The Complete Sutras

Bridget Shenachie
Senior Member

since 2002-01-23

Posts 1056
Kansas USA

21 posted 2009-10-27 08:05 PM

So glad that you brought your talent out of the closet. Feel so fortunate that I was there at your first public reading and I was blown away then. Keep 'em coming, lady poet. I've been dropping your name and bragging that I know ya.

Louise Ryan aka Bridget Shenachie

naturegirl
Member

since 2009-09-30

Posts 168
England

22 posted 2009-10-27 08:33 PM

sometimes the best things come from starting afresh somewhere new, liked your poem very much.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

23 posted 2009-10-28 09:23 PM

Awe Jeez Louise,I'm blushing here. Thanks so much for your more than generous praise.
_____________________________________
NG, thanks for the read, I'm glad you're liking my stuff.~L

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