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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2009-10-08 07:24 AM





the whisper men line the evening eves
there are velvet voices in unison
hovering as the clouds before storms

and then the thunder brings her gifts
as copper coins for their eyes
and the dancers of death collect their wages

tomorrow will bring back her only sun
with his new tattoos of another dawning day
she will be a proud mother in black leather

and her curves will be the nomads' liquor
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daark (highway series) for the fix way red and white crew

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1 posted 2009-10-08 09:36 AM


and then the thunder brings her gifts
as copper coins for their eyes
and the dancers of death collect their wages

The entire poem is superb... but these lines... absolutely stunning!!!

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2009-10-08 09:40 AM


Ms suthern. Humble thanks lady friend.
kindredspirit
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3 posted 2009-10-08 11:56 AM


Fantastic.
unboundpoetess
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4 posted 2009-10-08 12:55 PM


Cool as hell. I like.
H

Dark Stranger
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5 posted 2009-10-08 04:02 PM


kindered..thanks so much

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ms UBP, thanks lady friend for the eyes here

Margherita
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6 posted 2009-10-08 04:49 PM


Brings shivers. Intense and poignant.

Appreciated also the picture, the atmosphere is there.

Love,
Margherita

Klassy Lassy
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7 posted 2009-10-09 01:27 AM


I hear the thunder, leaving velvet only a ghost of moments in the night for the sharper insignias of tomorrow's tatooed flight.  How is it that addictions all seem to lead to copper coins?  ...sigh.  
Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2009-10-09 07:05 AM


ms mar, thanks so much lady friend..

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ms kl..it the old days it was gold coins for the ferryman journey..I guess nowadays the ferryman would get mugged for the coins..thanks babe

brneyedgrly
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9 posted 2009-10-10 12:10 PM



she will be a proud mother in black leather
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love this and love seeing your artistic side, D




Dark Stranger
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10 posted 2009-10-11 07:29 AM


ms browneyes..thanks ms S..I do appreciate your riding along
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