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Chalmette Guy
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0 posted 2009-10-07 12:38 PM


The waves wash over me
Whispers in my ear
Haunting melody
A song I’ve come to fear
Pulls me down below
Drowns me in its tears
Tells me where to go
But I remain right here

And my soul cries out in pain
Grips me endlessly
Then darkness comes with rain
Comes to carry me
And I would fall from grace
If they would let me be
In the waves I see your face
Looking back at me

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1 posted 2009-10-07 12:52 PM


So poignant.  This brings back all the fear of the storms in the south, that changed some of my friend's lives forever.  Every year that same anxiety builds, and it gets bigger every year.  Well written.

    
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Chalmette Guy
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2 posted 2009-10-07 12:55 PM


Thank you Mysteria...yeah, one of those messed up my life too.
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3 posted 2009-10-07 04:18 PM


I've read this both as the storms of life and those of love... and found it painful perfection whatever the interpretation.

And to think... I used to marvel at the power of a storm... Now? *S* I cower! *S*

brneyedgrly
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4 posted 2009-10-07 07:17 PM



I really like this one jer  


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5 posted 2009-10-10 02:13 AM


I agree with shellie - good writing, Jerry.  I'll just tuck this one away.

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6 posted 2009-10-11 04:30 PM



This poem has a a kind of 'wuthering heigths' feeling to it

eerie.. but beautiful

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