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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2009-10-05 04:59 PM


Oh Her voice, came back to me
in the masculine, as He
told me all that ought to be
in promises of Spring.

Vitruvian, in word and deed,
spun me as if I could see
the birth of sun-star's reckoning:
as I noted summer fruit

antedeluvian, I wept

relief the blossoms had not died
but were replaced with this, of mine--
I stood upon the hill and voiced
my pleasure that I made good choice
as I stood in solar cross
my chin in tilt my palms aloft:

"I AM" I whispered that I am.

I stood watch both night and day
and plucked the pestilence that came
from the branches, from the root
I guarded them as best I could
and Autumn came as a surprise -
chill wind storms of compromise
dried my sweat and sighed my sighs
as tears spilled secrets of my eyes
in the rushes of the change...

* * *

I weighed the olives, plucked the grapes.
The second harvest yield and Fate's
Fortuna stood in grim survey
pondering impassioned play
deciding I might go for three
if the churning inside me
could be championed once more
if perhaps the one green leaf
might be coaxed into belief
that Spring had come again to fields
as weary as I Am...

* * *

I'm fighting frost as I await
the bitter wind of Winter weight -
cautious curiousity
regarding taste and my own greed:

I will oil the garden gate.
I pray the first snow will come late.
My feet have worn a path and I
realize the compromise
I made when I had recognized
longevity means things will die
as roots of all things still alive

disrupt

my plans for graves.



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1 posted 2009-10-05 05:12 PM


I stood upon the hill and voiced
my pleasure that I made good choice
as I stood in solar cross
my chin in tilt my palms aloft:

"I AM" I whispered that I am.

... and then the ending... simply stunning!

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2 posted 2009-10-07 08:26 PM


You and your poetry are something else!!
Your thoughts are full of raw emotion,  and so deeply moving.  

You have a unique and wonderful gift!!

serenity blaze
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3 posted 2009-10-09 05:13 AM


Thank you both...and smile--gee..

I have TWO true poetry fans.

(On facebook I'm placing number 3 in "The Sweetest Person contest--but then, they are just getting to know me too...by tomorrow, I'm sure I'll place somewhere in the millions, especially since I removed that app) <--"drollz"

*grins*



Thanks again!

Klassy Lassy
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4 posted 2009-10-09 02:34 PM


Serenity,

I have to print this one, for that place of thought I never have words for, for fear I will evaporate if they ever come to light, you paint against the sky with arms wide open and the sunkissed essence of growing alive fills my thought in your poem!  

You Are amazing in your art of expression , but it is the heart of you that brings me to tears and smiles all at once.  


Susan Caldwell
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5 posted 2009-10-21 09:59 AM


"as tears spilled secrets of my eyes"

as always, beautiful words and beyond...but that line that I quote is my favorite..

love you madly.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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6 posted 2009-10-22 02:31 AM


It was a pleasure to go through the seasons with you dear missed N'Orleans friend.
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7 posted 2009-10-22 11:16 AM


So many beautiful and poignant quotables in this one, Serenity.  It is a piece I can picture being read at a garden party when the Shelleys were in residence in Italy.  Very classical, and very classy.  Thank you for a splendid read.

Sutra 8: Faith is not an alternative to thought: the one excludes the other.

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8 posted 2009-10-29 12:38 PM


Tres munches::

I followed the basic solstice plot, but got a bit confused right off the bat when you threw in the "antediluvian" sadness; that's a big period to use as a descriptor.  :-)

"cautious curiousity regarding taste and my own greed", so falls the weary gardner. Humanity among hints of gods.

-*-*-

Divide me again.

serenity blaze
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9 posted 2009-10-30 10:18 PM


Thanks for reading.

And Masked Intruder? I winced as I typed that, I knew it was...I dunno.

But the definition described the mood so perfectly...

It's great to see you again, even with the mask. *smile*

Love to all, and Happy Samhein.

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