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playing.with.crayons
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0 posted 2009-10-04 08:54 AM



Before ...
Sweet rush and gumnuts described patterns in the sky-
grey, unfolding whispers of the Dreamtime.
A hidden hazy halcyon
of long-forgotten afternoons,
where stories, found again in an old man’s
Quaking voice, coursed through children’s memories.

And sparks flew, spitfires in the dead of night,
Rediscovering lines and colours, reviving
Lonely ancestral spirits, to bring them back
to Earth.

Children were taught of birds and trees, the spirit
of the wind.
Footsteps made by people were in tandem with the rest.
Sleep was sweet, broken only
By the laughter of the birds, a promise
made long ago to the Sun.

Now ...
They lie on stained sidewalks; voices that once
Spoke to the wind, fall silent on ashen ears.
“Nothing but a crazy nunga!”

They held keys to forgotten places
where the Dreaming began.
Before the children cried for mothers lost, and
Freedom was no longer a possession they could claim.

Sorry is not enough.

Before long, they will see.
A stolen Dreamtime waits for them.



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1 posted 2009-10-04 10:06 AM


You have some brilliant lines in here, miss...a very striking commentary. Thanks for sharing....
Earth Angel
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2 posted 2009-10-04 10:42 AM


Well, m'dear, I see that you have been putting your 'crayons' to very good use!!!

~ Nice to have you back in fhe pip family fold! ~ and with a pretty pic of yourself!

A very fine piece of writing!

Giving you a warm, welcome-back pip hug,

Earth Angel



playing.with.crayons
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3 posted 2009-10-05 07:32 AM


Balladeer~ thank you sir for your kindly words

EA~ I didn't think anyone would remember me! I'm glad my wandering E-feet found their way back home to PiP. Thank you for the warm welcome back x
ps. lets just not think about that photo... its hideously old and hopefully I will get round to replacing it soon

BluesSerenade
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4 posted 2009-10-07 08:35 PM


Your poem is so effective and your message is clear.

Such a profound poem, makes me weep and yet clearly every thought,  worth holding dear.

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5 posted 2009-10-20 02:45 AM


Well said!

"A spring shower was cause to run
Until you twirled me in the rain" ~ BDC

AncientHippie
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6 posted 2009-10-20 10:03 AM


Sad social commentary, p.w.c., on so many levels.  You have treated the subject with a sensitivity that we can only wish our politicians and social scientists had access to. One can only hope that, through the magic of genetic memory, the Dreamtime will someday return.  Well done.

Sutra 5: Public self-criticism does not brighten one’s Spark of Brahman: it merely feeds one’s narcissism.
Jim's Guide to Enlightenment:  The Comple

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7 posted 2009-10-20 03:30 PM


So well done, and you are right, sorry is not enough.

    
Sláinte mhaith!
Mysteria

rachaelfuchsberger
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8 posted 2009-10-20 06:24 PM


What's a "nunga"?

Arana Darkwolf

playing.with.crayons
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9 posted 2009-10-21 02:29 AM


BluesSerenade: Thank you for the lovely words. I hope you weren't too weepy. Here's something to cheer you up!



EagleOne: thank you very much. I hope other people can say it even better!


AncientHippie: your thoughtful reply was very touching. thank you so much for reading and responding so sensitively


Mysteria: No it's not is it? Kevin Rudd's sorry speech was a wonderful gesture. But that won't really change the living conditions of people who really need it.


    
rachaelfuchsberger: "Nunga is a term of self-reference for many of the Aboriginal peoples of southern South Australia."

well according to Babylon anyhow!
thanks for reading everyone xx

~Cheye

and he said "little blackbird, take this letter to her"

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