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Among the Tors (Hexsonetta from the PW)
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Among the Tors (Hexsonetta from the PW) |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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Relentless winds sing shrill. Spruce trees are dwarfed in twists and towards the south they list. Upon the windy hills the air is never still. It bathes the day in mist. Smooth rocks, now wind-swept bones, were brushed with silty sands; then worn smooth ‘cross the lands where ghosts of Mammoth roam. In winds, they seek their home and gather spectral bands. Its needs can not be filled - this wind that shrieks and trills. - Alison |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Alison my dear you make sure you watch out for those Mammoth ghosts, we just don't want to loose you from PIP. Enjoyed your poem. Love. Lindsay |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Beautiful work, A. Well written, and flows like it is effortless to you. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Congrats on your fine Hex.  Alison, I can visualize and hear the mammoth ghosts thundering across the tundra! You sure do know how to create an atmosphere! Love 'n hugs, Linda |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Never heard of an hexonetta but I like the way you did it. It does create quite a picture in my mind. Ida |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
Smooth rocks, now wind-swept bones, were brushed with silty sands; then worn smooth ‘cross the lands where ghosts of Mammoth roam. In winds, they seek their home and gather spectral bands. _________ this poem is outstanding girly  very nice  |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Gave me a bit of a chill but that didn't detract from good poetry. When I grow up I'm gonna write a Hexsonetta! Helen |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Oh wow *claps* Chilling!!! Fabtastic writing. Love, H |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Lindsay, I'll be very careful. I hear that they have big old feet. Love you, Alison - Karou, Thank you. I am still working on the flow. Lots of tears in the Poetry Workshop have been spilled as I learn and try to improve. It's good to see you on the boards again. Alison - Linda, Thank you. I can see them too. It's fun to work with you in the PW. It's a great place to be. xoxoxo Alison - Ida, I had never heard of it too, but I am glad that the visual was effective for you. Love, Alison - Shellie, Thank you. I am a fan of your poetry so you brought a smile to my face. xoxox Alison - Helen I wrote this as I was thinking about a drive I took about a week ago. I went over a summit and the rocks were jutting out, so worn and smooth. The trees are only like two feet tall and are stunted ... they are probably over a hundred years old. It's amazing to think about this stuff -- and the wind was howling and blowing snow. It truly is a barren (but beautiful) place. Love, Alison - Heather, Thank you so much. I am glad that you "felt" the poem. xooxox Alison |
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Misty Lilacs Senior Member
since 2005-11-15
Posts 1060White Birch Forest |
Alison, this is unbelievably AMAZING! I loved it despite not having a clue what a Tors is. ooxx ________________________ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Either the wind just touched my skin or your words touched my mind to bring a shiver. *S* And I'm sitting inside, so my vote's for the latter. *G* |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
A haunting presentation, dear Alison. ~ You know how to truly describe the chilly and beautiful aspects of Mother Nature, whom carries such an ability to place us all in a state of awe. Wondeful, ARCTIC WIND |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Incredible imagery, dear Alison girl! Felt overwhelmingly real! Highly enjoyable work! Love, Margherita |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
man, alaboo, you so baller I can hardly stand it. I liked the first stanza especially. I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple, really. |
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