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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2009-09-22 01:39 AM


So blows this life into the mind
where lives a thoughtful energy
and it joins and dissipates the force
that once was paramount.

And in this mix creation’s orb
shrinks and shrivels, disappears
and becomes a servant to dis-ease
clothed in shredded leftovers
of its former glory.

To search and find and reinstate
what once made life worthwhile
like a chore unlisted on the board
of human existence.

Lonely is the voice in time
that calls with silent needfulness
for thought to rise and fight, fight, fight,
the dictates of a mortal life.

Creation’s orb is there somewhere
tattered, torn, not as before,
so blows this life into the mind
again, again, till death the end!

Helen / 22 September 2009


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since 2001-03-07
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1 posted 2009-09-22 02:48 PM


I had to real the wisdom in this twice.  I loved this stanza.  Beautifully done.

Lonely is the voice in time
that calls with silent needfulness
for thought to rise and fight, fight, fight,
the dictates of a mortal life

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
2 posted 2009-09-22 03:39 PM


Honey, I always appreciate the "Thoughtful energy" that you put into each of your poetic pearls of wisdom.

Love you bunches, Honey!

Linda



Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
3 posted 2009-09-23 05:41 PM


Death will be a new beginning, in my belief.
Transition ...

Our Path down here isn't easy, but life as I see it is a gift and it is always worthwile to be lived. I understand your melancholy, because I have those moments too and you render them so well with this poem.

Love and hugs.
Margherita


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