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larzana
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since 2009-09-17
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0 posted 2009-09-20 05:15 PM



The pit of hunger fights the fiend of insomnia.
Just sitting here in the cave of carnivorous renderings of what used to be my mind

Just thinking. Trying.

The hunger won’t let me slay the fiend and the fiend is too tired to feed.
So I’ll just sit here thinking. Trying.


So, tell me what you think. Plus this is a really old poem of mine and it remains without a name. Can anyone think of one?
Insomniatic starvation crosses my mind but I'm not sure...

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Margherita
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Eternity
1 posted 2009-09-21 05:36 AM


I think you think deeply. Feeding our mind is as important as feeding our body. We think better if we are nourished appropriately. And we sleep better too.
Clarity of thought sometimes is like an utopia...

Enjoyed this.

Love,
Margherita

anniepimm54
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since 2009-09-03
Posts 110

2 posted 2009-09-21 06:20 AM


insomnia.is a bad thing my friend sue suffers terribly with it, i have been lucky and never had anything like that good to get it out of the system in a poem though Good one
larzana
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3 posted 2009-09-21 04:36 PM


Thanks guys. I just can't get over how nice everyone is here. Most forums I've been to are full of meanies.
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