shadows of a different passion

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Open Poetry #45

shadows of a different passion

poddarku
Senior Member

since 2008-01-15

Posts 589
india

0 posted 2009-09-20 07:33 AM

shadows of a different passion
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Dispassion is my father’s raincoat
which I have borrowed not to return.

An earl-grey evening, tea is made;
windows can’t measure off season’s rain.

I tattooed my mind with an image
of the rain god’s presence; we have tea

while laying the blueprints of schemes
to wash away tears from the streets.

My father’s raincoat hangs on, cornered.
Rain and I dream quite passionately.

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[This message has been edited by poddarku (09-20-2009 09:59 AM).]

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2009-09-20 09:22 AM

You and the rain ... framed by your father's raincoat. It is an object, but you keep it as it represents a means to deepen your consciousness.

Rain is indeed a wonderful conductor for imagination.

Love it!

Hugs.
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

2 posted 2009-09-20 01:46 PM

Ku... I love your words...

Bisous de Paris
RDB x

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2009-09-20 08:00 PM

"I tattooed my mind with an image"

Nicely phrased.
I like what you do with rain imagery.

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

4 posted 2009-09-21 01:08 PM

As always, I love every syllable of this in all the beauty of its shades and shadows, in all its ambiguity and symbolism, its sadness (yet the poem's determination to be itself within its own happiness), its sensitive and vibrant imagery, its paradox, irony, passion and sculpted words, but my favourite, favourite, favourite line is:

"to wash away tears from the streets"

for as many reasons as there are tears.

Owl

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

5 posted 2009-09-21 03:47 PM

I love this... especially the ending! *S* Well done! *S*

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