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Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
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0 posted 2009-09-14 07:58 AM



we were playful like the sand sometimes
when it has a breeze whispering mischief
and the edges are upturned like new friends
just waiting to discover another other

you had that place you went to be a dancer
and I had that place I went to be a voyeur
and it was funny when we compared addresses
when we realized we were each other's lovers

both wearing blindfolds up until that tomorrow
and then suddenly the lights were back on
and we could see dark objects that stirred us
and made us want to taste them in our minds

we sipped the laughter water from freckle brims
and then wrote poems inside our own skins
with each other's hands doing the tattooing
until we were opened wounds crashing together

to make the sigh sounds of our demons healing


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daark (do of sand)


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Margherita
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Eternity
1 posted 2009-09-14 08:55 AM


quote:
we were playful like the sand sometimes
when it has a breeze whispering mischief
and the edges are upturned like new friends
just waiting to discover another other

you had that place you went to be a dancer
and I had that place I went to be a voyeur
and it was funny when we compared addresses
when we realized we were each other's lovers

both wearing blindfolds up until that tomorrow
and then suddenly the lights were back on
and we could see dark objects that stirred us
and made us want to taste them in our minds

we sipped the laughter water from freckle brims
and then wrote poems inside our own skins
with each other's hands doing the tattooing
until we were opened wounds crashing together

to make the sigh sounds of our demons healing



This is beyond any superlative!



Love,
M

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2009-09-14 12:36 PM


ms mar..as long as it does not aquire an expletive..thanks lady!!
brneyedgrly
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3 posted 2009-09-14 09:58 PM



until we were opened wounds crashing together

to make the sigh sounds of our demons healing

wow  


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Member Rara Avis
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4 posted 2009-09-15 02:45 AM


Oh, I love every word, every line, every image.  I am gushing, aren't I.  Well, I love this poem.

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you had that place you went to be a dancer
and I had that place I went to be a voyeur
and it was funny when we compared addresses
when we realized we were each other's lovers

---

Marvelous -

A

Dark Stranger
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West Coast
5 posted 2009-09-15 07:24 AM


ms browneyes...can you say wow with your eyes closed? thanks babe


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ms ali-san, I do love it when you gush, thanks little one

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
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Realm of Supernatural
6 posted 2009-09-15 03:25 PM


Loved this one, Dark!


ARCTIC WIND

jbstillwater
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since 2009-07-03
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7 posted 2009-09-15 03:45 PM


Brilliant!  What can I say other than that?

Huggs
Jan

Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2009-09-15 04:39 PM


aw....thanks amigo

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ms jb, thanks lady!!

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