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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2009-09-08 12:00 PM



Shall You Forever Be


are you still there
just beyond my glimpse
out of finger tips reach

shall you forever be
that touch impatiently waited for
a page in chapter out of order

I am still, yet my heart jumps
there are things, things unsaid
I should say them now
before time passes away
and I have lost my last chance
was it that I have been
too afraid of the words
or were you too afraid to hear them
for once spoken unable to unwind
and replace them upon my tongue
they have been safe inside me
and beat across my heart uncontrollably
a whisper, echoing against a wall
do I deny their existence, no
but sheltered them in the shadow
of their silence unrevealed
will they die a lonely death
nightly I run in a nightmare
running to and away from
an invisible monster’s edge
denial, unrequited, and rejection
I wake in total exhaustion
of what I should say

"I'm so hard to handle
I'm selfish and I'm sad."
— Joni Mitchell



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Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
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So. El Monte, California
1 posted 2009-09-08 01:44 PM


Excellent! You have outdone yourself here, Helen.
                              Ida

martiniat8
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since 2003-06-21
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Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic
2 posted 2009-09-08 04:38 PM


wow, I really feel this one
brneyedgrly
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since 2009-06-08
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nowhere and everywhere
3 posted 2009-09-08 05:03 PM



the first time I read you

the second time I take notes

          


Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
4 posted 2009-09-08 05:31 PM


"nightly I run in a nightmare
running to and away from
an invisible monster’s edge
denial, unrequited, and rejection
I wake in total exhaustion
of what I should say"

~ Helen, you pulled me into your nightmare ~ and I can understand why you're exhausted! You have that ability to make your readers feel what you're feeling ~ and see what you're seeing.

May your dreams be sweet, Sweetie

Love & a compassionate hug,

Linda

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
5 posted 2009-09-08 05:44 PM


Ms slick

Can see you drawing in the sand here. Enjoyed you ms

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2009-09-08 07:18 PM


Words that are perhaps better left unsaid until you stand before the person that truly wants to hear them...James
Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688
Waukegan
7 posted 2009-09-08 08:22 PM


.


Men at forty
Learn to close softly
The doors to rooms they will not be
Coming back to.

Donald Justice


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BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
8 posted 2009-09-10 11:19 PM


shall you forever be
that touch impatiently waited for
a page in chapter out of order

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

That's a beautiful page turning thought.  Your poem is hearfelt and convey's deep emotion.

Love the way you tell it, slick lady~

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
9 posted 2009-09-10 11:23 PM


slick - nice write...

BC

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Posts 20723
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10 posted 2009-09-15 10:06 AM


After losing someone and being haunted by words left unsaid, I found myself guilty of saying too much... and those words just can't be reeled back in once uttered. *S* So I know this quandary well... I just don't know the answers. *S*

Beautiful work!!!

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
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Realm of Supernatural
11 posted 2009-09-15 03:47 PM


Everyone needs a well deserved break! ~ Excellent write.


ARCTIC WIND

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
12 posted 2009-09-15 03:54 PM


Doors should never be closed before the words that needed to be said were said. When there is no clarity in a good-bye, it will hurt and hurt for a long time. So sad.

You have rendered this situation masterfully.

Love,
Margherita

jbstillwater
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since 2009-07-03
Posts 216
Albuquerque, New Mexico
13 posted 2009-09-15 04:27 PM


Love the style of this one and the passion that flies from your pen.  Words left u unsaid are never good.

HUggs
Jan

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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Spring, Texas
14 posted 2009-09-15 09:17 PM


Yep...that's my Slick, mighty with the pen she carves words that touch...and touch...

j.

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