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jbstillwater
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0 posted 2009-09-07 05:07 PM



colored pencil art by Janet K. Brennan, effects by jkb, 2007


Slipping from the den,
he disappeared unto the briar ,
his fur soft, velvet-robe-red,
waiting , watching through slits
gold.
.
Her key eternal,
slipped through fingers lovely,
laying bare dreams that had been
buried amongst pink folds,
forever.
.
His sword, once locked into a rock,
now free within his grasp,
a Lordly gift
and purpose thought for better means
than to slice at a fair maidens heart.
.
As twisted youth went missing,
eyes dimmed,
armor intact, weapon raised.
She would be his!
.
Standing amongst clover,
eyes trusting, lips full,
morning dew upon her breast,
she called.
.
He made his presence known,
and she so tender laughed a song.
.
Come to me, my love.
for I am not a maiden lost amongst pink silk;
but a wolf in the wild;
a jackal-waiting!
.
Your eyes dim with sly thoughts,
teeth drip with the innocent;
your red robes fall to your feet
exposing all that is you.

But I am not a maiden fair,
but a wolf in high places.
Oh , see I have a second key!
And I have been waiting!

~~~~
Janet K. Brennan



© Copyright 2009 Janet K. Brennan - All Rights Reserved
Bill Charles
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1 posted 2009-09-07 06:37 PM


jbstillwater - now this is a writing filled with it all. I like the words as you tell the wolf...

BC

Margherita
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2 posted 2009-09-08 06:05 AM


Quite the predator! Passionate and sensuous write, dear Janet and a beautifully matching artwork too. A captivating challenge of the wild that resides in all of us.

Love,
Margrit

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

GBride
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3 posted 2009-09-08 06:15 AM


Perhaps he had better flee
the secret of the second key
lest he live in a cage
his story takes a new page
Over his new cage hover
His new wolf-woman lover.

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2009-09-08 07:34 AM


ms jb..
enjoyed the reflection here
of the true prey and praying
kewl

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5 posted 2009-09-08 10:27 AM


I, too, enjoyed this a lot.  I love the marriage of your words and drawings.

Alison

jbstillwater
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6 posted 2009-09-08 01:42 PM


Thanks fellow poets, had fun writing this one

Huggs
Jan

ESHA SEN GUPTA
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7 posted 2009-09-09 01:36 AM


Very nicely the animal in all humans has been brought forward,which we keep hidden within wraps but it does come out as you have written mostly unknown even to us.


Love Esha


[This message has been edited by ESHA SEN GUPTA (09-09-2009 06:52 AM).]

jbstillwater
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8 posted 2009-09-09 01:04 PM


Thanks Esha and yes, so true.  Sometimes it is very difficult to see the wolf under the threads of gold or to even know which of the players is really the wolf!

Jan

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