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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
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0 posted 2009-09-07 08:03 AM


we took those rowing of boat moments
between the drifting side of sleep
and that gentle breeze of hems
before dawn leans down low to kiss

and shared the scent of our new leather
as our eyes searched their back skins
then opened to find another's eyes waiting
to see ours for the first light of day

those moments where our hands were confused
about the difference between proper
and the desire to know heaven from experience
when no one was around to hear our prayers

wordless words that just stayed on our lips
and made our soul moan from heart bottoms
then fly high above our recollection
wingless like gauze before the threads

when only the weaver could dream them true

__________


daark (do of sand)



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GBride
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since 2009-07-02
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1 posted 2009-09-07 11:02 AM


A really interesting poem of vivid imagray
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Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-27
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2 posted 2009-09-07 12:00 PM


I am seeing your romantic undersides and I don't know whether to leer or swoon.

A

Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
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3 posted 2009-09-07 01:46 PM


quote:
we took those rowing of boat moments
between the drifting side of sleep
and that gentle breeze of hems
before dawn leans down low to kiss

and shared the scent of our new leather
as our eyes searched their back skins
then opened to find another's eyes waiting
to see ours for the first light of day

those moments where our hands were confused
about the difference between proper
and the desire to know heaven from experience
when no one was around to hear our prayers

wordless words that just stayed on our lips
and made our soul moan from heart bottoms
then fly high above our recollection
wingless like gauze before the threads

when only the weaver could dream them true



Again, every line is a gem on its own, spilling sparks of emotion.

I feel like tip-toeing out of a wondrous scenery, as there is a touch of sacredness in this.

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
4 posted 2009-09-07 04:34 PM


Gbride. Thank you much


___________

Ms ali-san. Do both. I enjoy your eyes both ways. Thanks babe


_____________

Ms mar. Thanks lady friend

unboundpoetess
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since 2008-05-24
Posts 477

5 posted 2009-09-08 07:58 AM


Enjoy you soft and sibilant in my ear.

Loverly.
H

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
6 posted 2009-09-08 07:59 AM


ms UBP...thanks lady friend...miss your pen here!!
ESHA SEN GUPTA
Member
since 2009-09-01
Posts 108
Maharashtra,India
7 posted 2009-09-08 08:03 AM


I really read your poems more than once to grasp the meaning,but in the end I do them .
Feel like a dunce while reading your poems


Love Esha


Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
8 posted 2009-09-08 10:24 AM


Esha friend

It takes awhile for my weave to become visible but soon you will read between the lines easily. Thank you for spending the time.

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