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jbstillwater
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0 posted 2009-09-02 01:52 PM



colored pencil art and lighting effects by Janet K. Brennan

Points of light, a half-million
meet stars of a universe-convoluted.
One ends, another begins.
False symmetry.
City songs, mingled with benzene
tug at my mind.
Graced by a single thought.
I am on terra firma,
yet, alone.
And the world is not here.
It is there under the same moon where
Joseph lies in an empty cell, waiting.

Rose colored glasses.
I could use them!

Solitary in this tangled place.
As Joseph lies in the dark
where the floor meets the ceiling.
One ends, another begins.
False symmetry.
No points of light, only Luna
slipping through a two by four.
He is graced by a single thought.
He is alone.
The world is not here.
It is under the same moon where
she stands, waiting.

~~




© Copyright 2009 Janet K. Brennan - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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1 posted 2009-09-02 02:02 PM


Wow, dear Janet. That's excellent writing! Will read this more than once, for the emotions are strong and haunting.

Love,
Margherita

luminosity
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2 posted 2009-09-02 04:42 PM


wow, this is beautifully complex...does the title justice.
I wish I could write like this....(wish I could find my muse and give her a good prodding)

jbstillwater
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3 posted 2009-09-02 05:36 PM


Thanks Margi and Lum

Happy that you liked this one.  

Jan

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4 posted 2009-09-03 12:36 PM


Jan,

I love the partnership of your poetry and drawing.  They are perfect together.

A

Marchmadness
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5 posted 2009-09-03 01:59 AM


Excellent writing, Janet. Very touching,
                                  Ida

Earth Angel
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6 posted 2009-09-03 08:08 AM


Dramatic piece of art ~ and writing!

It's good to see your pretty smiling face now that you managed to post your photo!

"Rose colored glasses.
I could use them!"

~ I will lend you a pair on mine!


Linda

Margherita
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7 posted 2009-09-03 08:12 AM


Forgot to say how impressive I find your artwork too, dear Janet!

Love,
Margherita

jbstillwater
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8 posted 2009-09-03 07:09 PM


Thanks so much for your kind comments.   Hee!  Man, I can be such a ditz, but could not for the life of me get my picture up there.

Thanks for the comment on the art, Margrit/  I love to illustrate my work but do not think I am very good at it.  I did get a few peices published in an art book a while back, but that is pretty much it.  Very theraputic though.

Huggs to all
Jan

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