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Davepth
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since 2009-03-30
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0 posted 2009-08-31 06:24 PM



Hello people! =)

I'm quite new here (well, i posted something before..way..back...:P) So well, im just a random poet that likes to write..a lot..

This one thing is about my ex-gf....we split up due to her having some troubles at home and stuff..and it's heading back towards love again.. But it's all a bit unsure.

Hope you enjoy!!

I know it doesn't rhym btw..I wanted it that was, as it was written pretty much directly from thought..:P

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Revised Symphony

That summer..With every waking eye of the day,
We take a ride through one's old path,
Amidst tangled brakes of wispering reeds,
Their shy secrets confined,
If only a heurkening heed..

With night's gathering chorus,
Ate up the last embers of day,
Waving water weeds tolled,
Mellow music rids us of words to say,
Drifted far and nigh; Low and clear.

Till rosy dawns kissed the leaves hue..
It was the time, we used to depart,
Only to return back later again...
Those moments dissolved,
Yet my memories floors;
Have made it to eternity.
It is perhaps this,
To still feel a soft incense breath,
In ones silent night.

As that summer falls within an end,
And old lines are resumed,
We wonder if ours might to...
A symphony of nature's grace,
And another of life's hope,
They both sing so gentle...
They seem to fly...gentle as a dove..
It's the breaking symphony of Revised Love


Reactions are always welcome!

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Margherita
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1 posted 2009-09-01 03:10 AM


quote:
Mellow music rids us of words to say,



I love your revised symphony of love. Nicely written. Good luck!

Love,
M

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2 posted 2009-09-02 05:33 PM


This is beautiful.

A

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