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viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.

0 posted 2009-08-27 08:48 PM



Eclectic and interesting
you can be my midnight queen.
I will dance with you
in the moonlight.
We can sleep by day
and love by night.

I’ll bet
your pale glow skin
can blur my vision
with soft edges
and a fisheye lens.

With my body
I can ripple the surface
of your deep blue eyes
make your lungs
gasp for wind instead of air

Let me
and I will.

I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple, really.

© Copyright 2009 Paul Weisbrod - All Rights Reserved
Alison
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1 posted 2009-08-28 01:53 AM


I think you hit another home run, Paul.  I think I like that you show us your sides.  Not just one, but various sides.  It makes me feel like I actually see you a bit.  Plus, titles are another strong point of yours.

Enjoyed -
Alison

viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.
2 posted 2009-08-28 03:02 AM


I am glad to hear that you think so. I wrote this in like 3 minutes before class. I was looking at a girl, as usual.

I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple, really.

Margherita
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Eternity
3 posted 2009-08-28 05:32 AM


quote:
I can ripple the surface
of your deep blue eyes


This is a very enticing thought and the whole of your poem is very charming, dear Paul.

Love,
M

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with you
4 posted 2009-08-28 10:21 AM


"Let me
and I will. "


ok

enjoyed this

viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.
5 posted 2009-08-28 12:54 PM


Morgoparguh, thanks very much.


Seasoup, okay. be there in like, 2 days.

I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple, really.

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